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איך האָב דיך ליב

I came from a place
At the beginning and end
Of a situation
Where a question of
Who I was
Was asked over and over.

So sing it,
And in the frozen record song,
It's why
I will always tell you
How much...
That...
I love you...

So sing it,
And in the frozen record song,
It's why
I will always tell you
How much...
That...
I love you...

All that's beautiful
In you I can now
Find within me

I find myself
Alone in the dark
With the only fired cannon
Going off in my mind
Are the thoughts of you,
Dancing with me in the rain
Soaked from head to toe
Without a care of going home

We touch each other's beauty marks,
And I say that you are all that is beautiful,
Opposite of all sad music

But, I know that tonight
You will light one-hundred cannons

In my mind as I cry for you
Again
And
Again

Ill climb stone steps to the top
And start screaming
If that will get you to hear me.
To hear me
Say 'I love you!'

And forth I come
In hopes of spring
To your home
And you and I will flow
Even if we separate
My eyes will follow
Whatever you bring out
And grin at your smile
Seeing the love you have for me
And I hope
That's what is to be
Is you and me
And next time you open your eyes
That it will be be
That you will see

Author notes

For someone that means the absolute world to me.

She is everything. Everything that is beautiful. i love her with all I have to give and so much more.

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  • Red Rocket
    May 21

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    Good

    I thought this was refreshing and genuine; isn't good to see a dream manifest? Not to say that a person should become gold in one's eyes, but like you said: "followed" by them. There was only one word error (i.e. that it will be [me]). Thank you for sharing this brush with love

    PS. What does the Yiddish phrase stand for, I can't find it online lol.


  • couldbeworse
    March 24

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    We touch each other's beauty marks,
    And I say that you are all that is beautiful,
    Opposite of all sad music

    this is one of the most romantic pieces i've read ever. i loved the softer side of you.


  • monstruo
    January 14
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    absolutely amazing. your poetic style is refreshing.


  • Emberess
    December 10, 2008

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    Lovely as always with your pieces. It seemed to spiral around a central theme that was slightly beyond my mental capabilities at the moment, but it was beautiful. Maybe the girl, or the love itself, or simply the thought, I don't know, but it was lovely. Keep penning.


  • Short but cute
    December 9, 2008
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    I really like this. Very beautiful. I bet whoever the girl is will adore it.


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    December 9, 2008

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    you know, this could easily be a poem about a son's love or longing for a birth mother he never knew..maybe just found..it could be much more profound and meaningful from that point of view..

    as a love poem .. eh..so-so

    i enjoyed reading it.




  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 8, 2008

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    this is wonderfully done and simple put i hope you showed this to her, keep it flowing my friend, keep it flowing

  • specialbabygirl
    December 8, 2008

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    I love it, i really really do. nice writing the hebrew throw me off for a moment. howd you get it??? you starting to study hebrew?!?! lol, i really love it and you


  • MerelyMadness
    December 8, 2008
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    Sorry, I forgot to applaud

  • MerelyMadness
    December 8, 2008

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    I think the grammar of the Hebrew might be a little off, because the title doesn't seem to make sense. What were you trying to say?

    Great write, by the way. The repetition really framed everything nicely


  • Deathless1
    December 8, 2008

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    did you two really dance in the rain or was that a metaphor?
    i love the cannons in your mind.
    i think it is absolutely beautiful.
    and i hope she gets it.

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