Safety Where You Find It
Life; a dangerous condition.
Life; an all absorbing mission.
Life; assume defense position.
Safety where you find it.
Love; how do we define it.
Love; safety where you find it.
Love; I can get behind it.
An all absorbing mission.
She needs a big strong brother.
He needs to find a mother.
Strange; how they need each other.
Safety where you find it.
Safe; state of mind desired.
Safe; seeking what's required.
Safe. How are you inspired?
How do you define it?
A contest entry
- Prickly by Rebekah-Ann.
550 points, ended December 10, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Interesting consideration gone into each of the linked topics and also thought provoking when left with a question to ponder on.
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Beautiful poetic response to the picture prompt. I like the points you are making and the overall message. The repetition works very well, too.
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I read about a kind of bird once
that lived inly in thorny trees. I think it impaled its prey on the thorns too. A shrike maybe?
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Interesting bi-rhyme, with good meter and focus on your three primary considerations: life, love and safety. These are reinforced as focus points by your beginning line repetitions.
A highlight, or sidelight, the lines about how different needs can align themselves and make an apparent match.
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I'm just settling into a new job.
And with things being more settled maybe I'll be able to play with a few new styles like this. Cheers.
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The dependence of children is very remarkable and very well portrayed in this poem. Thank you for your entry.
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The need that everyone has for someone to depend on
is astounding. I think someone said long ago, "No man is an island." It is so true.
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I like the repetition in this, and that last line brings it all together. A good strong write.
Well penned,
~lost
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It must be a new phase for me.
It's pretty different from my normal writing. Glad you enjoyed it.
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