Christmas Haiku

Haiku

The cold is dawning,
Christmas has arrived again,
He has come with toys.

Part 2.

Christmas trees are sold,
They have lots of christmas decs,
Including Reindeer.

Part 3.

Here comes old saint Nick,

Laughing very loudly now,

So close but so far.

Part 4.

He is coming down,

That crumbling sooty chimney,

With an old toy sack.

Part 5.

Christmas cards recieved,

My Christmas cards are given,

What a long old year.

Author notes

Christmas tree, St. Nick, cards, chimney, Cold. For a contest.

But it is also gonna be for my NEARLY 7 (IN 2 DAYS) year old cousin Zain

A contest entry

Allpoetry Kids Christmas Bash 2008 (win a gold membership) by Little Eagle. 4200 points, ended January 11, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Do you like my christmas poem

Comments

By me, right now

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Polaja
December 20, 2008

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This is a lovely hauki string for your cousin I really like the progression of Christmas that you have shown here - and a very nice inclusion of the words from the word bank

Merry Chrisitmas!

Polly
Anna Emkah
December 16, 2008

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Five nice verses, but they are not really Haiku. Writing Haiku looks easy, but it is very hard. A good Haiku consists of two lines which have a connection with each other and another line (the first or the last) which is the opposite or a 'aha' moment.
You have written five beautiful little poems, which make a big poem all together. Each verse has 5-7-5 syllables. That in itself is already difficult. You did very well.
There is one word you have to change: recieved should be "received".

Anna.
Maxboy
December 8, 2008

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Your LiL cousin Zain sure is lucky to be getting all these very nice poems from you.

Very Nice.....Best wishes in the contest