Paint me with the color of sun.
Draw me with what I need to hold.
Then just do what needs to be done.
A lonely road had just begun,
only a selected few told…
Paint me with the color of sun.
No hands to change what must be done
Sadly I wear my head now bald!
Then just do what needs to be done.
I know I’m not the only one,
each piece of hair is now gold.
Paint me with the color of sun.
Fix me before I take a gun.
Broken my soul will now be sold,
then just do what needs to be done.
To see me now, will leave you cold,
and hurts more as the truth unfold.
Paint me with the color of sun,
then just do what needs to be done.
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Sounds like cancer or Leukemia to me, and maybe at a point quite far along. It's my favorite so far of your poems that I've read. There is a sadness and yet this beauty...and still beyond that is acceptance of how it is, and in the acceptance is where your poem finds that beauty.
The poem actually hurts a little, it seems to have found a spot within me that can feel the hurt. But the poem, yes, it's beautiful.
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a good poem, a deep sigh was lingering in between every word, the heavy sorrow calmly walked across the poem.
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A good use of a traditional form, do remember that however beautiful, your hair was not as beautiful as you are!
I am always at a difficulty with well written poetry about such hard subjects, one can wish to read the poetry at the same time as wishing it had never been written.
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Thank you for reading and also the lovely comment!
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Excellent rhyming my friend,
It flowed so well,
Much enjoyed the read
All the best to you and thanks for dropping by and leaving a comment
Ken
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Paint in the color of soul
I paint you with the color of soul which is ever bright. We all are alone in the journey of life. Husband, wife, son or daughter is but only for temporary company. But if you look at soul then that is same in all and immortal, only body is different. Husband, wife, son and daughter are all connected through that cord of soul. Discover that and get all the color you want in this life or thereafter. Excellent write.
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this is brilliant yet sad, really thought provoking .. humm...
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hi, good line-----> "paint me the color of sun" ...sad indeed...great job on this poetic form ( I never tried it yet)..you express your emotions very well...hope they can fix it ...Take care of yourself,
Erwin
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