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Sip Of Contaminated Love!

Light was an interminable torment for him,it throttled his lustful thoughts.
Darkness veiled the flaws of his mind within its eyes, drought engulfed a land of fraudulent love , now his wife had to taste a sip of death.

Barren corners of this brutal world discerned as a figure on earth,
drops of passion pelting incessantly down a stream of scarlet wine
embellished the dining table impeccably.Unconsciously, her lips stole sips of venom from the glass,malevolently prepared to deafen the sounds of her begging heart,she diddered uncontrollably until darkness rendered her body, a corpse in the midst of an ocean of gore.A cadaverous body buried alive in a cemetery of lost souls, trolled through the raunchy past of a once called loved one."Why?!" Her pursed lips opened in bewilderment as the shadows of innocence raged with spleen .Her misted eyes obscured the morals of sanity ,she knocked the dust from her eyes and hauled herself out of the casket with fires of revenge glistening in her eyes.Ardent chains of fire lit the sins of his body,oceans of mysteries revealed his malevolent gaze,waves aggravated splattered venom,they sculpted his name on her grave.

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sweet innocence
Dina

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  • LullabyOfADeadMan
    May 24
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    Oh bravo! Lolz. Great write youve got here.
    Thanx for entering and good luck!

    ~Always Dancing.


  • emoempess
    April 21

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    love it

    this is a good poetry...
    very dark poem...
    thanks for the entry..
    enter this group
    "the power of darkness"
    http://allpoetry.com/group/show/the+power+of+darkness


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    February 20
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    good poem. i loved how eerie it was as i read it. thank you for entering my contest.

    -deadly


  • broken-angel
    January 11
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    loved this x


  • etoile
    January 8

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    this was an interesting poem. i liked all the imagery. the third stanza is my favourite. great poem, keep it up.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • Rinoasis
    January 8

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    I like how this is written in free-form. The third stanza is my favourite part. This is written with so much emotion and imagery, I love it. I especially like the part: "fires of revenge glistening in her eyes" -it's so vividly evoking and powerful. The last part spoke to me the most, and the last sentence sum the poem up in a mysterious, eerie manner. It feels almost like a ghost story. Amazing.

    Thanks for entering my contest!
    Blessings,
    ~Moonchil


  • SheWasPreternatural
    December 24, 2008

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    This was chilling- and so full of agony. "Unconsciously, her lips stole sips of venom from the glass,
    Malevolently prepared to deafen the sounds of her begging heart,
    She diddered uncontrollably until darkness rendered her body,
    A corpse in the midst of an ocean of gore." - i think that was your strongest stanza. Those lines were just described so vividly. This was very dark in it's depth and meaning. Thank you for sharing and continue the great work- T


  • chilali
    December 10, 2008

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    Amazing imagery! This poem is wonderful! I love it. Well done Dina I am hooked to your poetry and words!!! I still cannot believe you are 14! Haha

    Much love
    Ylova


  • A Lonely Akumu
    December 8, 2008

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    Emotionally Enticing

    Whoa...this was piece was stunning, the wording, the imagery was beyond that of a normal poem. I'm happy the poem's name drew me in because otherwise I would have thoroughly missed out on this masterpiece of morbid delight.

    My favorite verse would have to be: Unconsciously, her lips stole sips of venom from the glass,
    Malevolently prepared to deafen the sounds of her begging heart,
    She diddered uncontrollably until darkness rendered her body,
    A corpse in the midst of an ocean of gore.

    Your a brillant writer, you have the explicid talent of painting a moving picture in one's mind as they read your words and feel the emotion of that of the poem. I could almost feel her despair, her want of revenge. That in it's self is astounding.

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