Christ was born under a winter star
Heaven's angels flew so far
Relentless joy accompanied with love
Instantaneous systems danced above
Sacred wings carried our Lord
To a clouded throne where enthralment soared
In brief moments hell froze through
Silent worship held so true
Bethlehem witnessed great celebration
Overjoyed with Satan's cremation
Rivalry and war now stood still
No more demonic screams ran shrill
Peaceful wise men visited soon after
Undying hope accompanied by laughter
Rage was forgotten along with fear
Eternity under our Savior is near
Author notes
Words used Bethlehem, Star, Winter, Sacred, Angels.
I did an acroustic which spelled out "Christ is born pure."
It wasnt really christmas, but instead on our lord's birth.
It was rhyming.
A contest entry
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Comments
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This is an interesting acrostic - I like that you have gone back to the origins of Christmas instead of focusing on the materialistic
very nice message and I really enjoyed the way you have created such an intricate acrostic
Merry Christmas!
Polly
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Thanks...
Thankyou for your help, I corrected them. I have a keyboard where some of the keys will not push and I forgot to use spell check. Other than that I am just not good at poetry and have never understood my english homework, yeah I am that lazy. Anyway thankyou for you lovely comment and help... -
This is a beautiful poem.
Unfortunately there are quite a few typos.
Here I will write down how it should look like.
Compare this one with yours and make the changes please.
Christ was born under "a" winter star
Heaven's angels flew so far
Relentless joy accompanied with love
Instantaneous systems danced above
Sacred wings carried our "Lord"
To a clouded throne where "enthralment" soared
In brief moments hell froze through
Silent worship held so true
Bethlehem witnessed great "celebration"
Overjoyed with Satan's cremation
Rivalry and war "now stood still"
No more demonic screams ran shrill
Peaceful wise men visited soon after
Undying hope "accompanied" by laughter
Rage was forgotten along with fear
Eternity under our "Savior" was (soon) near.
Anna.
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