I like to drink my coffee black
And smoke my harsh cigars
I like my ghetto bicycle
With brakeless handle bars
I like to slam my steel reserve
While sipping natty ice
And with low price, you're telling me
I'm living a cheap life
Well, here's for my black coffee
It's purer drank this way
With all of that caffeine you need
To make it through your day
I smoke my harsh cigars because
I think they have more spice
And I enjoy 'bout every beer
...Even natty ice
And here's to my cool bicycle
It's got no brakes, but see
The back is low so I can ride
Up hills more easily
So how 'bout you, how is your shit?
How much 'it set you back?
And can I ask, what would you like,
Cream, sugar or black?
Author notes
I was sitting down with a pot of black coffee, about to finish a Flash project. This just popped into my head from nowhere, and I jumped online to get it out while it was still there.
Tear it apart. I'm not going to cry.
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest 15 entries 40 words or less by mysticstorm.
700 points, ended December 9, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I'm constantly amazed at how well you handle flow and rhyme. Everything is so natural, so smooth, completely unforced. I really enjoy your writing. And this piece is certainly no exception. Very humerous, rather rebelious, temptingly logical, and delightfully spirited. Another splendid success.
S
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This was a fun poem to read. You sound like such a rebel in this, even though there is nothing at all wrong with drinking black coffee or riding a bike without breaks on the handles.
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haha i love this poem! i wish everyone could enjoy the simple things of life.
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I think "bout every beer" is fine, it helps the poem flow nicely that way, and you have a good rythim going with this one. Your poetry is pretty good. I like how you make it flow so easily. I can do that sometimes, but there is always something about my poetry that people don't like. Anyways I am rambeling again I think, so I am going to stop now.
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I like this. I like coffee and bikes and getting lost in old book stores in Ann Arbor and wait...I have to have sugar in my coffee, but other than that I think you penned a poem I can live with
Catch you later.
Love, Lane
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I like this...it is nicely creative and interesting...very creative with wonderful flow... just one problem for the contest, it did not follow the rule...
Best,
mystic
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hahaha AWESOME
how is your shit?
loved it
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