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The Springtide Moontide Ball

Chapter 1: Algebraic Expressions & their functions

... This form is used in conjunction with x and y, to appreciate the prime integer of certain quotients. By dividing by the denomonator, and adapting the formula, it is clear that x and y can be manipulated accordingly.

But before we continue...  

                                                                                        [fly away with me]

 

 

 

 

 

Turquoise moon tortoises masquerade

Shell mask'd balls;

Magically.

Muttering mealtime mango's await...

 

Silver salamanders

talk tall, scaly tails of

Salvador

suits - suede and suave alike

 

Groovy gnu's

in space cadet shoes

Silently chauffeur

The crater~filled carpark

Summoning bouncers and bells where needed 

 

Dancing devil doves

Decorate the skies

Ahead

Flaming fireworks for the Springtide Moontide Ball

 

 

 

"Come along,

Sing along,

To the Springtide Moontide Song

Let's be happy

and so gay

 

Cause the

O-

cean

 

Re-

ceeds

 

TO-

DAY!

 

YAY!" 

 

 

 

But banquets of bestiality

Tentacles and talons

and goats on backward hooves

Are hard to miss

Among the forgetful frolick'ed

 

The pickpocket poacher

peacocks with their two~faced president

propagate, propagate, propagate

their pious pretences

across the dance floor

 

Sly sloths

deal with malevolent matters

secretly

passing snort sections underhand

 

The caucasian cows wearing miniskirts,

carelessly intoxicated,

collapse into inner-calves of beefcake bulls

in closet~backrooms behind the bar

 

And all the invited

wearily waltz ahead

To the lament of the Springtide Moontide Ball

 

 

 

"Come along,

Sing along,

To the Springtide Moontide Song

Let's be happy

and so gay

 

Cause the

O-

cean

 

Re-

ceeds

 

TO-

DAY!

 

YAY!" 

 

 

                  [soft landings...]

 

...just breath.

It is the simple first step towards logical thinking, which allows for a better understanding of the current work. Now lets continue. As seen in the x and y patterns displayed earlier, it seems impossible for such a formula to work, however...

Author notes

Ok. Where to begin?
I wanted this to be bursting with creativity. Where structure may falter, my creativity in this piece endured. I wanted it to be  a Monday morning maths lesson, where your mind sets you free on an adventure.
I brainstormed this during Springtide (when the moon and sun creates powerful tides), thinking: "If there was anything living on the moon now, they'd probably be celebrating." So I threw them the craziest party ever.
I then kind of used that and created a paradox (is that the right word?) between the party and humans, and how there is all this glam in our world that simply covers up the underplay ~ a hard, crazy life.

I honestly don't feel like adding more to this. The rest you should just understand.
Any Q's?
Feel free to ask.

Ok, after some complaints from close AP friends, I have decided to include this extra explanation. When I originally wrote this piece, I was trying to emulate something PSYCHELDELIC. Now for those who pretend to understand the meaning and are in fact completely ignorant to it, please check out this song by Jimi Hendrix, entitled, Bold As Love (http://www.metrolyrics.com/bold-as-love-lyrics-jimi-hendrix.html). This is a piece that may not make sense to some, may seem meaningless to many, but was done to express something freakishly awesome, such as a Ball on the Moon. "Dancing devil "doves" may seem utterly irrelevant but it serves a crucial purpose in painting a story, rather than having some deep philosophical meaning. No comprende? Well then F-off.

A contest entry

Too abstract? I think this may hit the nail on the head.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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Comments

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  • sora.
    March 6
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    can't believe i never read this before now.
    holy mother of shiz.
    XD


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    February 6

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    In spite of the fact that this is an abstract I would argue for one seemingly insignificant change (to some), but would make the opening math paragraph sound a little more professorial.

    "By dividing by the denomonator, and adapting the formula, it is clear that x and y can be manipulated accordingly."

    has an unneeded "by" and I think ousting the first one is the better choice although either would work and leave the sentence meaning the same as it does now.

    "Dividing by the denomonator, and adapting the formula, it is clear that x and y can be manipulated accordingly."

    yeah, if you consider submitting this anywhere else, chuck the first "By"!

    Congrats on your win!


  • ThePoePoet
    February 6

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    Even though I did not win the contest I still have to give props to some one who is also a mathematical genius. I do not have a lot of time to put up poems but Progandother you did pick the right person to receive those 550 points so to Ditt0 fantastic work keep it up.


  • Progandother
    January 10

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    ...absolutely amazing...from the very beginning structure represented by a mathematical chapter in a textbook...alliteration flying all over the stanzas and the way you used the words was astounding...at first read (this was ignoring the author notes) I assumed that this spring tide ball was an animal ball for bizarre and made up animals (kind of reminded me of the "ugly bug ball") but the fact that the ocean was receding made me assume there was some sort of apocalyptic reason to this celebration...I then assumed you used some mathematical formula to make this...and it made me try and crack it...I didn't succeed very well...so I gave up and read your author's notes to see if my assumptions were correct...and although they weren't the whole concept is pure genius...

    ...I am overly impressed by this...things like this help me work out new methods I can do to make new poetry...thank you very much for entering...

    Oliver


    • Ditt0
      January 10
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      Oh and I can only imagine how that mathimatical formula went

    • Ditt0
      January 10
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      YES!

      Thank you jesus! Yes! It seems as if there actually are people on this site that would appreciate this piece! It's a miracle! A holy miracle! Thank you for your understanding! I was worried that there was nobody out there that would actually enjoy this... Phew!

      Oh and thanx for the awesome contest. The real poet alternatives rarely have a chance to shine...


  • Chocolate Chip
    January 6
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    nniiiiicceee!!!!

  • Topnotchsy
    January 5

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    Nice creative piece. I like the way you introduced this, it provided a nice contrast from the boring and straight and rigid and logical, to the far out, and colorful.


  • SomeGirlYouKnew
    January 5

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    this is wowsome.
    i like reading abstraction.
    it makes my mind go fuzzy and colourful.
    awesome job.


  • Never Fall in Love
    December 18, 2008

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    yes.


    I although did not like the beginning and ending .. it seemed a bit pointless.

    you're in.
    http://allpoetry.com/group/info/UNPLANNED%20as%20unexpected%20as%20you?stay=1


  • UnderThePickleTree
    December 10, 2008

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    Well...

    I wasnt complaining! And I totally got the phsycedelic thing...it was just the alliteration at the beginning that got to me...

    But I have the say that I totally dig the "f-off" bit in your explanation! It makes me smile :-) Claps for that, my friend.


  • Ryno
    December 8, 2008

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    Yes

    I think that the metaphor and ideas behind this were insanely creative and that really shows your potential in being your own unique artist - they way you viewed that moon just opened up for a great piece -

    I don't think the imagery here was anywheres near as strong as other pieces from you. All your other pieces have such powerful imagery.

    Remember: just because you want to be creative, doesn't mean that you have to sacrifice your other poetic devices and technicalities for it.

    I loved the idea, I just don't think it was portrayed strong enough. But I also know that you have have the potential and skill to go through.

    Please wait for Chandni.


  • FallingSideways silver member
    December 8, 2008
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    amusing metaphors that make me think of antics of the whitehouse

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