My thumb in my mouth
his hands in his pockets
thats how we met.
I had lost my puppy
scraped my knee
and sat on a patch
of sticky burrs.
My face was all sticky
red and sweaty
my curly hair, tangled.
Faded cotten dress torn
and stained.
I whimpered and cried
like my floppy puppy
with ears so big it trips on them.
Suddenly, with his fishing pole on his sholder
Faded overalls, barefeet,
he came upon me.
“Whatcha doin’?”
“N-n-nothin’”
I said, glaring at him.
“Do ya need help?”
I pondered.
I did need help...
Finally, I answered.
“Yes.”
He held out his hand.
I reached back.
Just two little kids
but a big friendship.
That one gesture
changed my life.
in that field between my house and his.
******15 years later********
“Where are you taking me?”
“You’ll see.”
His gloved hand
in my mittened one
led me along.
My feet felt the path
that had carried me
to that field where we first met.
“Ok, you can take the blindfold off.”
“Oh!”
Before my eyes was a beautiful sculpture
made of pure snow.
“Go inside.”
As if in a dream,
I walked toward it.
Going inside, a candle
caught my eye.
Written above it
were the words I had once only dreamed of seeing.
“Will you marry me?”
I turn around
tears in my eyes
to see him down on a knee
gently holding a ring
the tender golden light of love
shining in his eyes.
“Yes! Yes! Yes!”
I throw my arms around him,
the tears no longer able to be contained.
Gently, so tenderly,
he wipes them away
and takes my hands in his strong ones.
*********
Many years later,
when my hair was gray
and his was gone,
we visited that field again.
Old, overgown
gnarled and mangled
not what it once was,
full of struggles, hardships
aches and tears.
I reach for his hand
as he reaches for mine.
A sunset makes us pause
and understand
that though the field was
full of struggles and pain
it would always be
a field of gold.
Author notes
i have been meaning to post this for a really really long time.
i hope i fullfilled your challenge, Blue Skies...
...please don't kill me for taking so long...
Please tell me what you think
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this is so adorable! I love the story it tells. it is so soft and sweet and really enjoyable to read.
nice poem & thanks for sharing. <3 -
oh and I thought it was very creative...haha
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wow
this was a really nice little romance piece...it felt like a story, but it had the flow of a poem...It was very happy...good write!
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Nice
Very simplistic, visual and sweet!
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i thought this was breathtaking... the romance of the story, the commitment of love... how he asked her to marry him... it was all done so well.
i liked how you broke it into stages of their lives, and relationship, yet bringing them back to where it began. so sweet.
this is one of your longer poems, and you haven't posted for awhile. i dont know how long he waited for this love poem, but i can see he thought it was worth it... as any waiting for someone who truly loves is.
dont wait so long for your next post.
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very nice story.. a very romantic write.. with a sort of lyrical quality to the story line.. almost fairytale-ish ... unless this is a true story.. then that would be crazy.... is it a true story???? ha
i like the timeline set up youve got goin on.. .. and i like the 'struggles pain tears aches etc" part.. that kind of adds a new dimension to it...
and the last line is pretty.. 'groovy' (
) .. you could read a lot into 'gold' .. very metaphorical.
nice. worth waiting for.
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