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What I was thinking on Sunday December 7th at 3:53 PM

In spring, at times
the sun rises and it becomes too hot.

When the rain comes, it cleanses everything

but then it turns cold

and the snow just buries it.

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  • Violinstrings silver member
    December 7, 2008
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    can you turn into a christmas idea and add mary
    compare it to christian faith


    • Picnic-Lightning
      December 8, 2008
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      Hmmm, I don't think I can do that....I was actually planning on leaving it as it was, because it's literally what I was thinking that day at that time, so I can't very well add more now



  • Violinstrings silver member
    December 7, 2008
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    good idea

    beginning of more good ideas if you can think of some