Pluck it from the vine of vines.
From that grape, create a wine
That's true and whole, pure and fresh.
For now your lord requires wine.
Out of the garden, forbidden fruit,
Lays a small and dusty patch.
In the summer most vines rot
With small insects that eat away
All vitality of the grape.
Extremely rare is a healthy grape.
Along the rows of rotten grapes
The sun will beat upon your back.
It will give you fruit, you get its burden.
The exchange of these is only fair.
For after hours of looking through
The rows of a dusty vineyard patch
You will find a pure grape resting there
Upon a vine that's wilted through.
You will take such care in plucking this
For one wrong move can make it pop.
And once you have removed this grape
Begin the search to find its pair.
And maybe, if you have some luck,
You will find that grape, another fair.
You pluck that grape most deftly then
And prepare to start the search again.
For years will you search for the grapes
That will make a wine befitting me
But when that search has come to end
You will begin that search anew again.
A contest entry
- there is truth in wine by And Hyetal.
850 points, ended December 26, 2008, 9 entries
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Very Good
I liked all of it- the part I liked the best -
"It will give you fruit, you get its burden.
The exchange of these is only fair."
this is so true of many things in life
Well done
Good Luck in the contest
Wind Walker
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Thanks
Nice made my night
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What a wine this could be..
Beautiful expression..
Have a wonderful Christmas..
..with a good glass of wine..
Cheers..
XXJeannette
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i like it
try not to use the word grape a lot though it makes it sound awkward but overall your poem was good -
Interesting and enightening. Written from a Kingly perspective, it would seem. I suppose most people don't think on it much, but a vintner's work must be difficult. Keep writing. Merry Christmas, and God bless!
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a nice comparison of life with grapes...
a nice detailed description...!!!
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well done
For years will you search for the grapes
That will make a wine befitting me
But when that search has come to end
You will begin that search anew again.
and so it goes well done
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it's so random, but i like it!!
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Very detailed description. Good Job.
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Nice job. I enjoyed this poem quite a bit. For me it was a very spiritual poem and was inspirational.
Mike
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Extremely rare is a healthy grape.
Along the rows of rotten grapes
The sun will beat upon your back.
It will give you fruit, you get its burden.
The exchange of these is only fair
I like the language used here, message is noted and overall feeling is peace after the storm. Well done!
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I really liked this. It had a Renaissance feel to it. I also enjoyed the organic flavor. Very nice. You will do well with this. Thanks!
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I'm not sure of the back story here; I feel like I was dropped into the middle of a complex relationship. But the rhyming is very interesting, and the descriptions are vivd. Very well done.
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there is some great imagry in this i enoyed it very much
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