Lying minds made villains in the desert
conjured weapons that never existed,
dreams carving paranoia's patriotic saber
to drive in heart of enemy
in a war undeclared.
Passion's wrapping their flag
around the heart,
marching off to crusade,
valor the righteous rage.
Alas the coffins hold the crowns
from futile blood stain grounds,
claiming success over wrong
when evil was keeper
of their speaker's soul.
Clashed declare won
by tongues with venom presumptions
hiding their motives
behind causes cloaked in deceit,
whereby the champions
living to speak
that death the claim
is accomplished peace.
Author notes
The picture used with this write I do not claim as my own. Picture found on google images.
Option number 23
Title Prompt: 'A Victory Of Tainted Conclusions'
A contest entry
- The Mystery Title Prompt Contest by Glasyalabolas.
1400 points, ended December 16, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow sweety that was deep. i loved it.
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I love this take on the prompt. Very heartfelt and it seeps emotion. I know how I am reading it and applying it to the subject matter of the poem, I hope everyone can see what this is getting at.
Congrats on HM.
Good write.
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This Is Deep
"Clashed declare won
by tongues with venom presumptions
hiding their motives
behind causes cloaked in deceit,
whereby the champions
living to speak
that death the claim
is accomplished peace."
I had to quote you because I really feel the emotion coming from these words. This is real talk and can be comprehended in a million ways to whoever reads it. You really played with the words the right way and also laid your hidden message between the lines. Good writing skills. I really like.
Keep writing and I'll keep reading.
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whereby the champions
living to speak
that death the claim
is accomplished peace.
this part right here, i just get a mixed feel for, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest -
Oh My Word~
Girly this is a Beauty and a Powerful piece You have versed~ Excellent~
the images grab and pull at the Heartstrings
Now I want to go and
someone~
Swells the eyes
Love this!!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet One
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Phenomenal That’s You!!!!
I agree with moon2u this is the best poem I've read tonight and then some. Worthy of reading and reading again. You outdid youself with this one and I wish you the best in this contest for you have penned a winner. God Bless, Jo-Ann
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Very good write my friend! you have great ability and talent and i enjoy your work. best of luck in the contest.
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bravo...
this is the best poem I have read this night
and deserves to win something
good luck
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different thank god honey yes spread your wings i hate that about some artist just talk about the same crap all the time and you actually did a great job with this kudos*rosse*
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Wowzers~
Me need to come back
Oy!!!
for the road~
Woot!!
I be back...- runs into wall -
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Okies.
Title Prompt No.23 is: 'A Victory Of Tainted Conclusions'
Many thanks.
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