I wish I should have told him, as a mother, how much I loved him.
I wish I should have told him, that his gift last year wasn't silly, but it meant a lot to me.
I wish I could have told him, that even though we fought like crazy, I still loved him to care.
I wish I should have told him, that his girlfriend reminded me of myself so long ago, and that is why i disapproved of her.
I wish I should have told him, that the piercings made him look tacky, and that he was far more better than that.
I wish I could have told him, when he asked to borrow my car, the reason I told him "no."
I wish I should have told him, that when he stole my car in defiance, I wouldn't have been mad, but I would have been upset.
I wish I should have told him, that even though he may have had 2-3 drinks, he still shouldn't have been driving.
I wish I could have told him, that when he decided to take 5 people home in a car built for 3 comfortably, that it was too full.
I wish I should have told him, that when you go really fast, and have been drinking, your senses become impared.
I wish I should have told him, that semi-trucks do not stop on a dime.
But now, I have to bury my only son, and all that I wish I could have told him, will never be said.
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- Get the Drunk Driving message out..... by AnnD.
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This goes out to all the mothers who has lost a loved one in drunk driving Accidents.
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Aw.. this poem is so sad.
.. I can really feel your emotion and your regret.
Needs improvement: I wish I should have told him, that line is very awkward.
Overall grade: 7/10
Thanks for entering -
Oh.
flippin' heck
I send every single line back to you, with love!
That touched me, I lost a brother lately, I can relate to loss.
family are like milk- you don't miss it till it's gone.
best wishes to you,
sian
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A heartwrenching write from the perspective of the mother having lost her child to such a tragedy.
These effects are so far reaching, and all drivers, young and old alike must get to realise. that it CAN happen to them.....
Thankyou for your entry....and for supporting such a great message.
Ann
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Regret is a waist of energy even though it's very justifiing.
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Wow! Fantastic and intense toward the end. About love and regrets.
Beautifully done.
Now, as you asked for critics, I will add what few I have.
One, I would suggest making it a bit more clear early on it is a mother to son, not girlfriend/ex-girlfriend talking. that took awhile to decern.
Two, think over which things are "could have told' and which are 'should have told'. It may change the feel and the message. More of a 'don't put it off or let it slide' kind of thing.
Good luck in the contest!
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