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Wanting to feel nothing but the breeze

I found my legs running
shoes racing against my skin,
  it burned
and I fell crying to the dirt
the air stood still
watching me struggle
watching, and wondering
what was going on
the fight inside
the mind ticking like a bomb

I explode,
and die a little more inside,
every day
I run away
from those feelings
to the trees,

hide me,
   save me
be my solitude.

I find Winter wrapping strength
and my heart is
colder than the season,

       when will it kill me?

I wait,
the snow blows
the wind turns
swallowing me
I turn around
now dancing to the very thought
I want him
I want to fall down
and never get up

here the wind
she whispers to me
dance
    dance
          dance
as the ice stings my eyes
my body falls
dying..

dance
   dance
         dance

my body froze
I feel,
nothing,
my mind displays pictures
  white.
      pure.
    innocent.

the ground grows blurry
as the wind,

sings a lullaby of death
covering my eyes
    hands and feet

wishing me to forget the day I was even born.

dance

  dance

      dance

 

and my heart leads the grave.

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Option 3-title 2

this is killing me.

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  • Meroza
    December 15, 2008

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    This is such a powerful and dark poem, I would never have guessed it could be written for that title, but you pulled it off and you have stunned me.

    Well done and best of luck


  • chilali
    December 10, 2008

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    Wow. Such beautiful imagery. I love the emotions that you have portrayed in this poem! A great write indeed. Good luck in Meroza's contest love. This was WOW!

    Much love
    Ylova


  • maralisa silver member
    December 8, 2008

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    aw steph your imagery is wonderful and your emotions very deep and powerful good luck inthe contest maralisa


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 7, 2008
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    in all honestly this is one of a kind my friend, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Puppydog gold member
    December 7, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!!

    Oh how I can sympathize with this, I know how hard it is to care and not to have that care back. One does feel like falling into a void where no one can see them.'s


  • Alyzeh
    December 7, 2008

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    WOW. SO many emotions. You totally spun me with your words, it was like I was running after something with all the focus on that person's body and the surroundings hazy!
    Strong emotions Steph, very strong. Goodluck in My Meroza's contest.

    Love you lots
    Alyzeh

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