excuses on her wrists
a threat in her mind
she looks to the stars
and swallows your
[l i e s]
she knows she's not right, here
[her arms; mirrors of what you do]
yeah, she'll be alright
but no thanks to
[y o u]
she exhales her hope
and when she walks away
you'll be on your knees
but her excuses won't make her
[s t a y]
Author notes
Sorry, it's a little more than 10 lines.
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Comments
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This poem is beautiful, i loved it.
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This poem had a great rythm. I loved the story you describe. Thanks for you entry!
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great poem and i like how you wrote it it flowed really well and i'm glad i was able to read it...good luck.
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niclet written
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good
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This is amazing!
Wow!
There's a lot of emotion in this.
& I can relate to it, a lot.
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lovely poem
i have been there too. when you are so depressed and down and not knowing what to do. it hurts real bad and sometimes you just wish you could die. could this be about an abuse or could this be about a girl who is hurt cutting her wrists? anywya it can be anything in so many ways. very nice poetry. read some of mine if you would like to.
it is deep and explains a lot about me and my life too.
isn't poetry written as it happens in our lives?...i think that it is.
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i think i can make an exception... lol. uhm, i realllly like it. great job! are any of your other poems in this kind of genre? because i would love to read more.:]]
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thanks(:
I have a few more kindof like this I guess.
I'm not sure how to diferentiate between the genres though. lol.
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