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Just one fret

Each rift had lifted souls to flight
in wonderment, pure joy and light,
but chords had soon augmented
as our love fell far from sight.

Our picks were thrown down on the floor
and harmony was heard no more,
heart strings were stretched and broken
when you simply closed the door.

The neck is warped and falls apart,
one fret left; vibrates a hollow heart.



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  • MJ Forgives
    December 12, 2009
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    I really like your poem. I enjoyed reading this. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
    -Jess


  • ecrivain01 gold member
    February 9, 2009
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    Better than the majority ...

    of poems entered here, but the competition is fierce.

    Thanks for entering.

  • Bob Fox
    January 22, 2009
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    Poet

    I do love rhyme and this is perfecto. though a sad ending it is penned so very fine.


    • Sandi Alford
      January 22, 2009

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      Hi Bob
      thank you for your graceous thoughts and time viewing my scribbles, I truly apprecite it . I love rhyme too, and for it to come off the meter has to be right. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one. I know it has a sad ending, but I couldn't take the metaphor any other way, When I saw the pic, which I need to add to the page now that my membership is back, the title popped in my head and off went the muse

      Thanks again!
      Have a fantastic day, Sandi


  • grinlips
    December 8, 2008

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    Wow... This is great

    This has grace and gives me great desire to hold the guitar in the pic.. combined with unforced rhyme and a great flow. Thank you for your entry. Be proud of your Trophy... :-)


    • Sandi Alford
      December 8, 2008
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      Wow is right, I'm completely shocked to have won!

      Thank you, for your graceous thoughts and lovely trophy, and the points! My gold membership should hopefully be active again by the weekend, so I'll be starting a new contest with the points

      Thanks again for hosting this inspirational contest!

      Let the ink flow!
      blessings, Sandi


  • catalyst.
    December 7, 2008
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    one word:beautiful.


  • Sonja
    December 7, 2008

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    I knew that you can, but with this so nice rhyme you show us how you can do it much better. Very nice my dear friend.
    ~Sonja~


  • MargaretG silver member
    December 7, 2008
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    The sustained minor chord made my heart ache. Very well done!

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