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My Dead Thoughts



The bite took more than I thought,
as each passing day draws life; escaping -
never did I know that I'd die by just one phrase.

{I have nothing for you}

Hands grip in desperation

and my heart weeps in solitude.

 

 

 

"You're not worthy of my blood,"

it keeps floating

never landing

and the pain....

 

 

 

....isn't there,

 


becoming that much worse.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

30 - 60 words on the given prompt

60 words

A contest entry

What to do in an insane world?

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  • alreadygone2009
    December 8, 2008

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    I think that the last word should be worse? Maybe I'm wrong. But it is a great poem.
    *HS*

  • Solo Wisp
    December 7, 2008

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    Love the usage of the font formats to convey the meaning, to bring the poem life. Awesome is an understatement.

    Best of Luck!


  • sheltered gold member
    December 7, 2008
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    wow again
    this is freakin' gripping


  • PerfectImperfection
    December 7, 2008

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    Creatively spun piece to go along with the prompt. Nice format with a smooth, sullen intensity left to ponder. Thank you for your entry!

    [[worse seems as if it would sound better than worst btw]]


  • Cannonsfire
    December 7, 2008

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    Great write but the color makes it a bit hard to see *goggle* lol but then its been a long day

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