We met
And I loved you.
I will never forget.
My fairytale was coming true.
Then you punched my face and my arm was set.
I cursed the day you left me blue.
I fell into your net.
I'm sorry, too
We met.
Author notes
No, this never happened to me. But it has happened to alot of young ladies just looking for love in all the wrong places. Sorry, no big point here except don't be in love with being in love. Mister Right isn't always Mister Right Now. This is a poetry form...just don't know which at this time. The meter is 2/4/6/8/10/8/6/4/2. The first and last verse is the same.
A contest entry
- random by happy-lil-artemis.
650 points, ended December 15, 2008, 12 entries
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Wisdom with a punch
Lots of wisdom---with quite a punch! So that's what it is? Being in love with love? Well, lots of wisdom here....
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I think the down fall of many young ladies losing "themselves" too early is do to wanting to "be in love". After they are "tied down" the man's true color show up. He is no longer courting and his true salfish nature comes into play. And "she" had better not get in the way... Thanks for the review and the encouragement.
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Your comments are so insightful. They add an extra dimension to your poems.
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good luck
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You've excellent words of advice for the young ladies. A dream of love can turn into a nightmare of love lost at the drop of a hat. Well done. Thank you for sharing.
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This is written really well. It's amazing. This is such a hard truth that so many have to live with on a daily basis or have lived and thankfully get away.
No words of criticism... Very well done.
~*Lady
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Ah, I really enjoyed this form of poetry, whatever it may be...When you figure out, tell me. I really enjoyed this poem. Sadly, many people can relate.
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This is sad
This is sad but so true. we fall in love with the fairytale and not the person under it. And yes most are sorry the met but you know what they need to look at it a new way you learn something new with each loss. Very nice work and I wish you luck
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