caeca invidia est.
whoever said that love is blind has a lot to learn from envy. envy, one of the seven deadly sins with a color to match. green. green the color of emeralds, the color of my birthstone. I am filled with envy, the resentment and jealousy I have for that girl wearing nothing but Abercrombie and blue ripped skanky jeans. I resent her, I resent you, I resent the lies you told me and the scrapbooks we made together because they just remind me of how things were and how once upon a time love was blind, but now, now only envy and jealousy exists for the new scrapbooks you are making with someone else.
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ad astra.
will you take me to the stars? will you hold the sun in your palms if you could to prove to me that you’re willing to burn to show the smolder in your heart? will you love me for as long as the earth turns?
you told me once I belonged with the stars as a constellation because I was so beautiful. ten days later you left me at the bottom of the world further away from the stars than ever in a place so cloudy that even Sirius, the brightest star in our solar system couldn’t shine through. you aimed for the little yellow balls in the sky but you never took the shot, just like me, I aimed the gun at my head but I didn’t have enough courage to go through with it.
we never made it.
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amor vincit omnia.
yes? you asked questioningly, unsure of even this simple answer. does it feel better to know that I love you unconditionally and I will swim across the largest ocean and travel to the next galaxy and back just to be with you? I asked you once if blue is blue then is love the definition of you and me? I wanted to hear you say that love conquers all things, but all I got was a question in return.
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concordia cum veritate.
we matched better than puzzle pieces, better than yin and yang. you were the earth and I was the moon, but the way gravity kept us in place and the way we never stopped rotating around each other really kept us in harmony. a certain love was seen, an almost parasitic engagement that held more truth than music.
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te odio.
do I? do I really mean it this time? this time it was not just a reaction to you yelling and screaming angry malicious words. this time I started it all and I said the three evil words. but am I lying?
te odio; it flows quite nicely of the tongue almost better than te amo. But that’s the key word in the sentence, almost. I’m just as confused about everything I’ve ever written, everything I’ve ever felt. this anger, confusion, and hate. every single feeling in the grand scheme of things really means nothing so even if I say it a thousand times will it mean nothing?
Latin; can it be made even more beautiful?
Author notes
title:
ab imo pectore - from the bottom of my heart
paragraphs:
caeca invidia est - envy is blind [green]
ad astra - to the stars [yellow]
amor vincit omnia - love conquers all things [blue]
concordia cum veritate - in harmony with truth [orange]
te odio - I hate you [red]
basically I wanted to write a poem in Latin, but obviously that would've been too hard so I ended up using phrases for inspiration for each paragraph. ALSO each paragraph is supposed to represent a color, which I wrote in brackets after the definition of each phrase above^^. I hope you can see the colors as you're reading.
enjoy 
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Username: mesmesrized--x
First name [or name you will like to go by that is not your username]: Emma
Age: 16
General poetic style: um, it changes; i guess freeverse/prose
Why you’re interested in this contest: i need advice on how to be a better writer and i love contests.
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i shall stick to my former comment. this is stunning and overall captivating. you deserve clappies, though (; thanks for enteringg!♥
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I loved this write, it looks like you spent a long time on this one,
And it's a great piece of work.
Not sure I could have produced something of this magnitude myself.
Excellent write,
my favourite stanza is the last. Red. Te odio. You're right, it could almost flow better than te amo.
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Brilliant. That's really all I have to say. I can see why you won so many trophies with this one. (: Welcome to the finalists♥ -
This was a story and this was poetry all blended together so beautifully.
Your images and similes and metaphors and concepts astound... I really felt each emotion as you brought me along for the ride, into the corners of your own feelings.
Beautiful. Congrats on making it into X- Factor,
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Congratulations! You are one of the 16 finalist to make it to the mainstream of the competition. To confirm your interest in competing, please apply to the group ASAP. Just include an emoticon or whatever you want in the application.
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originality: 8/10
creativity/poetic devices: 8/10
mechanics: 10/10
balance of images/ideas: 9/10
personality/emotion: 9/10
line breaking/structure: 10/10
personal opinion: 7/10
title: 5/5
rules followed: 5/5
focus: 5/5
cohesion: 5/5
diction: 5/5
syntax: 5/5
[extra credit] X Factor: 0/5
TOTAL: 91
Laura
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102 X-Factor
originality: 10
creativity/poetic devices: 9
mechanics: 10
balance of images/ideas: 10
personality/emotion: 10
line breaking/structure: 9
personal opinion: 10
title: 5
rules followed: 5
focus: 5
cohesion: 5
diction: 5
syntax: 4
[extra credit] X Factor: 5
TOTAL POSSIBLE: 100
Way to rock.
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101 - X Factor
originality: 10/10
creativity/poetic devices: 9/10
mechanics: 8/10
balance of images/ideas: 10/10
personality/emotion: 10/10
line breaking/structure: 10/10
personal opinion: 10/10
title: 5/5
rules followed: 5/5
focus: 5/5
cohesion: 5/5
diction: 5/5
syntax: 4/5
[extra credit] X Factor: 5/5
TOTAL: 101
You are a contestant to look out for.
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yes.
I think the Latin was perfect. I'll have to agree with his chardonnay, this was very creative. I honestly don't know how you did it, but the way you phrased each sentence was perfect for the whole theme. The steps and the colors blew my mind. I'm rambling.
~Cassie
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In my opinion, this is the most original audition-piece yet. The imageries you chose were perfect; those metaphors and similes just worked so well together. On top of the creativity that makes this so interesting, the passion, the pain, the love, the hurt -- it is all boiling from the page, and the imagery you selected emphasized those feelings even more. Intense, and beautiful. Loved it.
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poems about stars make me happy.
and adding latin too?
gorgeous.
will you take me to the stars? will you hold the sun in your palms if you could to prove to me that you’re willing to burn to show the smolder in your heart? will you love me for as long as the earth turns?
^^i love that
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I loved that...
I'm studying Latin so I didn't need the translations =) Wonderfully done..
Thank you! <3
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shivers
you took my breath away can not point out favorites I would have to to copy the entire piece,
this kind of love I understand
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"will you take me to the stars? will you hold the sun in your palms if you could to prove to me that you’re willing to burn to show the smolder in your heart? will you love me for as long as the earth turns?" <-- Amazing. And I did see the colour yellow when I read that stanza.
"I asked you once if blue is blue then is love the definition of you and me?" <-- adorable.
I liked this poem a lot! And, though it wasn't perfect, it was incredible on its own merit.
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ad astra was my favourite.
lmao how come I've used latin in poems before and no one ever noticed
just goes to show that your writing is 15832968924 times better than mine
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bahaaha
youre def more amazing, i noticed
but like, you just used te amo or something
i used like every paragraph and the title.. more noticeable
♥
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'concordia cum veritate.
we matched better than puzzle pieces, better than yin and yang. you were the earth and I was the moon, but the way gravity kept us in place and the way we never stopped rotating around each other really kept us in harmony. a certain love was seen, an almost parasitic engagement that held more truth than music.
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O god. this is definately one of my favorites here I love the imagery, the color scheme and the latin. Everything here is so beautifully expressed almost as if you ripped yours heart out and smeared it one paper. This is amazing.
' I’m just as confused about everything I’ve ever written, everything I’ve ever felt. this anger, confusion, and hate.'
Amen.
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"Latin; can it be made even more beautiful?"
Used in your poetry I think it can =]
I loved every single heartfelt word of this poem.
I loved the rhythm and flow of it, and the fact that it was Latin you chose and not a "modern" language like French or Spanish or Italian.
I don't think I've ever seen anyone incorporate Latin into their poetry before.
I can't find any criticisms for this poem, it's as close to perfection as I think is conceivably possible.
Your talent amazes me more and more.
If you ever stopped writing, I think I'd cry.
Shelly
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P.S. 3 applauses are not NEARLY close to enough
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thanks so much shelly
your comments actually always make me happy
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Awh I'm glad to help.
Your poetry always makes me think, I can always relate to it
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