A warmth -like falling into sleep-
surrounds me. Sun is above; I know.
"Sunny out?"
"Yes."
Yes. I know.
I listen for the steps
of people on the street.
Slide and shuffle -sullen movement.
And on such a sunny day.
I touch the ground of warm concrete.
I listen to distant conversations.
While my eyes, glassed over in confusion.
Sit broken in my head.
My ears, my mouth, my hands: reliable.
My eyes?
Betrayed me before I knew them.
But at least I feel the sunshine.
Author notes
Option #3
A contest entry
- I got 3 Options can you turn them into what i want to read by Theory Of The Lost.
550 points, ended December 8, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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To start thanks for entering. I really liked the way this was worded it flowed nicely , it stay consistent; it wasn't good then bad good then bad, it kept the reading going throughout this piece well done and good luck
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"A warmth -like falling into sleep-"
Love it. This entire poem is amazing. It started strong, and didn't disappoint. That ending is beautiful, the entire poem is beautiful. I love it!
Well penned,
~lost
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