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gloom

reverberations of the mind

bouncing off half painted walls of silence

into a twisting carousel of snowballing missed opportunities

generating a vacuum of indeterminate strength

that sucks souls into its chasm of parallel realities

in which broken dreams reside 

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Option 1.
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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    January 22
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    Nicely abstract

    it really made me think

  • Theory Of The Lost
    December 8, 2008

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    to start thanks for entering. Ok for the poem this is very strong piece you used a lot of big powerful words, but you didn't go overboard and kill it , your piece is short but wow just very descriptive and ya. This defiantly fits with the option you picked. I really like poems that have a strong opening line and you nailed it. I couldn't pick a weak line in this very well done and good luck to you