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The reflection of me.

                  I decided one day,
                 To walk through the forest,
           and some how, I really quite don't know,
                  I ended up beside the River of Cloe,

             its sweet waters drawed me near,

          but I wasn't ready for what appeared.

 

               A reflection, a reflection of me,

              one of my life, and its rejections

          of the true connections I should of made,

    with the people close to me, and all around myself.

 

                    All I realized I was doing,

            was drifting farther away from land,

          and what I needed to do to get back,

               was to lose the old me,

                and start over again, 

                hopefully without and end,

              thats was just like the old me.

 

       That reflection told me all, all that I never knew.

 

           I've not returned to that River of Cloe,

            or the way I was before ,

         but I know now something, I never did......

 

     .....Reflections cannot tell you what you know......

 

        

         .....But what you don't know, about yourself.

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  • a fun read...a great story...thanks for the indulgence...peace an dlight, kp

  • "All I relized I was doing," relized is suppose to be spelled realized

    "was drifting father away from land," father is suppose to be farther I do believe

    Other then those two spelling mistakes which we all make from time to time I like the poem. Thank you for sharing


  • SubKitten
    April 27

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    This was an interesting piece. The emotional aspect of this was strong and came through very well. Though the piece overall flowed a bit choppily.

  • jadeangyal
    February 12

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    This was a nice poem about seeing truth and potential in a mirror. I always like poems about a person finding a turning point in their life. Good poem, and here are a few suggestions:
    In the first stanza, "drawed me near" should be "drew me near." In the second stanza, "should of made" should be "should have made."


  • Heroesrox
    February 3

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    I hate the fact that this good piece was entered into so many contests and you did not even win an honorable mention!!! WTH! I don't get some people.....lol. Awesome write! Thanks so much for sharing it!


  • Luciferschild
    January 26
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    thank you for entering and good luck


  • untouched pages
    January 26

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    Ok now i feel bad... your so young!! You have a wonderful way about your penning. I can forsee great things for you if you can keep up this amazing works!! Thank you for letting us read this wonderful work. PS i can totaly relate with this work and I'm sure many other people can to.

  • really good

    wow your 12? i loved it really good imagery and a fairly good flow to it you have a great talent keep writing.

  • nice entry, thanks for entering


  • Ginger Woods
    December 28, 2008

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    I love the ending, it was epic, I never thought of a river like that but it makes sense. Like a mirror, tell's you everything you don't want to know. Good job and good luck in my contest


  • MizaLePiza
    December 14, 2008

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    Very good. For a 12 year old, you're quite fantastic. Thank you for commenting on my poem.


  • etoile
    December 12, 2008

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    i like the last couple lines the best. they're really profound and make the reader think. the imagery is very nice as well. great poem.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • broken-colours
    December 8, 2008
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    I did not feel this at all. Looking into oneself is certainly deep enough a topic to write about, but I was distracted by how repetitive this was and how the rhyming was very forced. A poem does not have to rhyme to be poetic or beautiful.

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    December 8, 2008

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    Your imagination went to work well as far as I'm concerned. I like this very much; thanks for sharing.
    Good luck to you.
    Brian

  • poetyaknoit
    December 7, 2008

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    well done. I love the last two lines. Be careful on your spelling though... you wanted to say "an" not "and"; "realized", etc. Best of luck in the contest. Keep on writing, ~TC

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