I’m dancing on the rapier’s blade
And I’ve sheathed myself in moonlit flair.
Stars hum sweetly and whisper of times
When cutting words were still my edge.
I severed the sonnets and songs unsung
But now dull memories only shine in my head.
If silver and stealth could be deemed as cunning
I’d be a ninja, but I’d be in want of a soul.
I dip at the hilt and swing on the tang
But what said agility maintains the strength
Save for twisting poetics and dark metaphors?
If words are my passion and my passion’s dead
Who then, do I still hold this sword for?
Author notes
I wrote this with the intent that my "writer's block" would be quelled, but unfortunately, it failed to work. But hey, I wrote something for the first time in a while!
~Capitaine Rouge
A contest entry
- I'm not sure. by etoile.
700 points, ended December 12, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Is there anything specific to improve on? Suggestions for a better title?
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If this isn't death to WB, nothing is. Is it just me, or do your poems read like ballads? It's wonderful. Your words dance and sing, enthrall and invigorate. Keep at it!
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this has beautiful imagery in it...this really made me read slowly and let my mind wrap around this and imagine!!bravo!!
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For your age and writers block
this really is commendable, and i say age because when i was 15 oh my... the stuff i wrote well lets not go there lets just say i was very angry and leave it there 
All this aside, writers block seems semi permable at least because most block poetry i read... well it really shows in the words that the poet is struggling, but this you pulled off brilliantly. A great write and i'm glad i stopped to return the favour. ^_^
Laura
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Thank you! I appreciate it.
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for someone trying to get over writer's block, this was great. great imagery
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this was a wonderful poem, even with writer's block. my writer's block poems are generally horrible crap. anyways, I really liked the ending and i loved the imagery.
thanks for entering and goodluck
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wow, i luv the use of words in this poem
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Wow. This is amazing! I love the imagery of blades and cutting throughout, and the way you tie it in to work with words and poems. If this is you writing with writer's block, then you are truly amazing. I very much enjoyed reading this; Wow is all I can say.
Well penned,
~lost
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