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Deadly Sins

Faces so many faces jutting out as she ran

Tons of hands with groping fingers caressing

Running, panting, trying to escape the unseen

The walls of the thorny maze catching her skin

Like a fly caught in a vast and intricate spider’s web

Icy white clouds issued from her mouth with each exhale

Blood bubbled from the cuts that marred her pale skin

Her heart hammered against her ribcage desperately in vain of calming it’s self

The shadows ate at her surroundings creeping closer to her frail and broken frame

Bewildered scattered thoughts and run on sentences filled her mind in twisters of endless fog

Salty pathways of forgotten tear stains were apparent on her ghost like face

Eyes wide with indescribable terror and despair

Ripping at the thorns that held her captive she ignored the biting pricks that invaded her senses

All that mattered was survival

Gasping, grasping for the air that never filled her deprived lungs quick enough

Clawing at her throat desperately wishing for the oxygen her body desired to somehow come forth gushing like a geyser

Spiraling deeper and deeper into herself, her consciousness collapses like dominos thrown in motion one by one falling in swirling pattern that was her mind

Lips blue, eyes clenched shut her chest stilled

Her body encased in the shadows as they devoured her whole

Biting, tarring her very soul until she was no more

This is what hell is like

What fear idolized it’s goals as, it gave life to monstrous shadows

Lust, Gluttony, Greed, Sloth, Wrath, Envy, and Pride

We never stood a chance

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  • ‘This is what hell is like’ ...

    The ‘she’ in this poem seems to be depicting the entire human race ... there are many of us that feel what is described within this piece ... I normally don’t fully like free verse, but you entwine the words used and the images into a great piece indeed! ... wonderful job.

    G.


  • blood.stained.tears
    December 12, 2008

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    good

    there was lots of description in this poem. it was described in a scary way, that i believe (i hope) it was meant to. good job. keep working


  • Horcrux.Breathing
    December 10, 2008
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    your discription and similies are wonderfull very well written i love the last two lines


  • peregrin
    December 7, 2008

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    ... damn.
    This is amazing!
    The picture it paints, it is like a movie coming to life... wow.
    Such imagination.