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Never

I've never known a pain so fierce
  Your heart its fullness did not feel,
Never once sustained a wound
  Your bleeding hands were weak to heal,

Never ached with emptiness
  Your gentle presence failed to fill,
And never been in depths so deep
  But that Your love was deeper still.

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  • Vickie J
    December 6, 2008
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    I'm not good at interpreting writes, but this felt like it came from a wounded heart. The emotional message is strong.
    I'll have to stop by and read the finished product-