The drums of war, beating.
The music that brings a new regime.
The graceful repitition of insignificance.
The beautiful disaster of life.
A shadow cast upon lonely light.
It takes its time, bit by bit
bit by bit, bit by bit, you hear
I hear, the pulse, the awakening.
The world I see, the world you see
Their is not much difference,
we see only one premonition,
Our eyes are closed waiting for that moment
Bit by bit it can be seen.
Bit by bit it can be heard.
Bit by bit it grows stronger.
Here, there, everywhere
At the last beat.
Witness the master come
riding across the shadows
that haunt the moonlight.
The elusive shadows
that haunt the moonlight.
It will, with certainty bite the time
Envenoming judgement in veins of souls.
The pulse of the awakening.
The last beat, >>heartbeat<<
The master rides, then carries you away.
"Life is pointless, but living is not."
Author notes
I hope this write entertained you, and i hope you like it
A contest entry
- Poems Please (Revisited) by Violet Moodswing.
1750 points, ended December 19, 2008, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Bare in mind that english is not my first language. And im only a mere 17yr. old so excuse me(i guess) for any faults in my writes. I am prepared for any constructive criticism.
Comments
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wooow
this is awesome. i wouldve have known english isnt ur first language. u write extremely well!
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This isn't your first language? wow, i am diffinately impressed. this is a great piece of work. Keep it up.
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wow what a great poem
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amazing
this is a truely an amazing poem you can visuallize this very easily amazing i love it great writeing and keep doing an astounding job on it
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I LOVE IT!
i love it! its awesome -
it's dark yet there's a ray of light in the end. good job : )
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ooo, this is very creative and interesting. very good job with it ^^
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Awesome!!!
Yep liked it very much it's just one of the best pieces I ever read specially the last stanza each line unique and imaginative.
"The pulse of the awakening.
The last beat, >>heartbeat<<
The master rides, carries you away.
"Life is pointless but, living is not."
The lastbeat heart beat it's just fabuklous keep on penning these amazing thoughts and good luck
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AMAZING
my favorite line was
"Life is pointless but, living is not."
this line says it all ...
this poem is great!!
I love it!
you deserves more than three applause!!!
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i like your poem
it is a great piece. i loved it hope to read more of your writings -
Another thought provoking piece and unusual subject matter. It is nice to be in such good company. Congratulations on your Bronze Trophy.
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Wow. A powerful ending. I like your use of layout. I don't know if you intended it but the first half of your poem resembles the old pictures of the mushroom cloud depicted in atomic bomb photos. It intensified the mood and meaning of your write.
I like the simplicity and directness and your use of >>heatbeat<<
Often symbols can be overused but this was effective and enhanced your meaning and the feel of the poem.
Very nicely done
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