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Amor del sur

I breathe with you,

and there is a scent of Mexico,

an aftertaste

Negra Modelo on your lips

as I suck each one into my mouth.

 

I trace the aztec shape

of the fading lake of bathwater

on your back-blades,

 

I fingertip it and make you shiver;

 

you quake, and shape yourself to me,

breathing Spanish love-words

into the air,

    into my ear,

        into nowhere-in-particular.

 

I had been dry,

and sharp as saguaro,

my arms aching

from being held in naked,

empty surrender.

 

Then you flung yourself
– a dying bird – onto my thorns
and bled with joy, breaking me,

biting me careless of your flesh,

careless of my sap running rivulets

upon the desert floor.

 

From nowhere your milk-skin,

its baby-musk spinning me, is making

dreamshapes,

    dreamships,

        dreamscapes,

            dreamskips in my mind.

 

We are not bodies, but cones of light,

sparking, darting like sharkfins;

I dive into your eyes,

and we know love-as-death,

diosa y diablita,

mass shaping space,

our red shift, our poison,

and our eternity.

 

 

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  • tara wilson gold member
    March 5

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    i have no idea how i ended up at this poem, lol, but i absolutely enjoyed this, what a beautiful sensual poem.
    congrats on the gold. i have had this bookmarked for a while to read over...i think breath should be breathe in line1?



    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 5
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      You're right about line 1! How did that typo happen?

      I don't know how you got here either - the "views" link doesn't even log your visit!

      I am glad you liked the poem.


  • Ho74pp1eP1e
    December 23, 2008
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    Very nice, this was worthly of Gold. Well done.

  • The D O M
    December 22, 2008

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    I like to have a contest that is hard to judge, this rather spoils that idea!!!
    Fantastic stuff, and I have no hesitation in putting this at the ptop of the pile!


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 9, 2008

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    i am completely and utterly
    in awe of you. i cannot say
    anymore than this.

    Love, Lane


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    December 9, 2008

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    last three lines ...

    and these lines:

    I trace the aztec shape
    of the fading lake of bathwater
    on your back-blades,

    I fingertip it and make you shiver;



    i don't understand the beautiful languages like that but i understand this very well ...

    and this:

    and we know love-as-death,
    diosa y diablita,
    mass shaping space,
    our red shift, our poison,
    and our eternity.

    and the middle line, of course

    i think a person who understood no language at all would understand every word and line and go away looking for someone to kiss on the lips ... anybody, anybody at all



    fourturtlesealofapproval*


  • Rembrandt Clarke
    December 8, 2008
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    ...

  • chordphrute
    December 8, 2008
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    ... rowr.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    December 7, 2008

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    This makes me really glad you're on my favorite list.
    Can't find a favorite part, except 'D' all the above.


  • IronMaiden1236
    December 6, 2008

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    GoolllEEE

    What am I supposed to say!!! The azule mist caresses my mind and I inhale, lungs fill with sensual longing. You're sharing satifies my dry soul.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    December 6, 2008
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  • Bad Bill
    December 6, 2008

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    Excellent!

    You've definitely raised the poetic bar here with this highly literate (and exquisitely erotic) piece. I love it.

    With admiration,
    Bill

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