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Just a Little Longer


My soul is fueled
with wretchedness
Between the world my
soul travel in emptiness
Confused with decisions
that are hard to define
To the bluish skies I look
Then a melody voice whispered
& said, just a little longer 

I haunted, I am lonely;
I hear them calling me
Death seeps its way
into my world you see
I am falling apart; I am
facing what I fear the most
But hopelessly I pray to
hold on strong on my post
then a melody voice whispered
& said, just a little longer 

Angels of the demons guarding
me watching my moves
Holding on as hard as I can,
just to quench my pain
Thunder roaring over my world,
as my tears mixed in with rain
I wonder if this is my fate, or am I
just a victim of circumstances

Darkness looming and spreading
its wings over my soul
Feelings of sullenness
conquering my little world
then a melody voice whispered
& said, just a little longer 




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  • BeautifulFlame
    December 6, 2008
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    John

    Just alittle longer....I can hear the emotion that is running deep. Hang in, hold on tight to His hand.
    He will lead you through...My prayers, my spirit is with you.
    Just alittle longer ...you have come so far hope is not far off.
    Faith to know He loves you and He will keep you.
    Remember your the only rose i know that blooms in the concrete and what a beautiful rose i have seen.

    Love and a gentle hug,
    ~Lisa~


    • theburninglegend silver member
      December 6, 2008
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      Lisa

      Woooooooooooow, My dearest friend, and Mentor. How have you been? I know I have abandoned yall for a long time but I believe that I have overcame the circumstances and obstacles and now here with you guys again. Thanks Friend and I sure do know that having faith is the solution to getting stronger and stronger. and they always say, "That which does not destroy us can only make us stronger", I believe it is true and it sure made me stronger. Love and Hugs

      Thelegend

      • BeautifulFlame
        December 6, 2008

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        Yes my friend!

        I believe what you say is truth
        "That which does not destroy us can only make us stronger"
        You are strong because you choose to be.

        I am fine sota but i guess we all have our demons to face.
        I know though i have God on my side what more could i need, I once told Him i couldnt feel His love like real, He couldn't hold me when i needed Him (like real arms) ...He proved me wrong ...He rocked me like a little child.
        I will never forget that moment as long as i live.
        Sometime life seems almost to much to bear, but my only though should be back at that moment. Remembering He captures each tear that falls.

        I loved your poem


        Thunder roaring over my world,
        as my tears mixed in with rain
        I wonder if this is my fate, or am I
        just a victim of circumstances


        We are all victims of our circumstances, it's how we handle them that gets us to the place of knowing we have made it through.
        ss

        • theburninglegend silver member
          December 6, 2008
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          HEY

          How are you? oh no, what is going on there sister? I hope all will just wash away like the tears we shed. Well you are right on the dot, we are victims of the circumstances and it is only us who decide to take the right path, but sometimes we are faced with a question How? I have a quote that relates to this statement above that might open your eye when you wake tomorrow.

          We usually tend to choose
          The directions in
          Which our lives will take,
          & accept the defaults
          Thrust that hit upon us
          Thus, becoming victims
          of circumstances. But
          sometimes when we
          Do so decide, we certainly face
          The inevitable question of How?