A little mouse that we called Gypsy
Was feeling just somewhat quite tipsy
When he drank a small mug full of beer
We watched him as he toppled over
On the head of our puppy named Rover
And onto the floor the poor dear
He tried hard to get to his feet
His antics were funny and sweet
And Gypsy was hiccuping madly
He took him one step and then two
And swaggered as the effects grew
And Rover was watching him sadly
We sensed a big smile on his face
As he waddled all over the place
What a spell that mouse had us under
Then Gypsy bumped into the door
And went sprawling all over the floor
And Rovers eyes followed with wonder
Then up on his hind legs he drew
As his faith and his confidence grew
And he sparred with an invisible foe
He did a slight jig and tap dance
As Rover watched on in a trance
And to the floor poor old Gypsy did go
Then Gypsy’s head flopped all around
As he rolled there all over the ground
Then he fell on his back where he stayed
He slept and he slept through the night
We’d never seen a funnier sight
Than when Gypsy got plastered that day
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ROFL! That completely made my too early Saturday morning hilariouslly wonderful! Great flow, I clicked on it cuz it's title is my name!! ha! Nicely penned.
xx always,
gypsy
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Thank you for reading. Much appreciated. Shall drop by.
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Aww with baited breath I thee read,ready to pounce and punch to death that imaginary cat.
ha ha excellent
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Thanks, mate. I am glad you liked this one.
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Cute one, I just read this to my daughter and now she wants a print out of Gypsy's picture. I thought the imagery of him putting his dukes up was funny.
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Thanks, mate. I am glad you liked it, and especially your little daughter. One big hug to her from me.
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This is just great. I laughed the whole time I was reading it. Great job,
Laura
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Thanks laura. This was one from a fair while ago. I dare say though, It could do with some improving.
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GREAT
I love this poem! I was laughing all the way through and also worried if there was going to be a cat involved... Thanks for the laugh!
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Thanks, mate. Your comments are appreciated. I use to have two pet mice. (They never got drunk though - tea totellers). lol!!!!!!!!!!
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haha your such a good story write. And to make it rhyme too.. another very good one.
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Thanks, mate. An old poem i had forgotten about.
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Nicely written
Enjoyed the rhyme and the flow and I liked the structure also. But, the story was cute no matter the rest and for that you can be considered one of the best.
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Thanks so much for your lovely comments. I really think i need to work on this piece though. I just haven't got around to it.
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aw very cute write indeed.
well pend to the end.
keep it flowing.
best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
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Thanks, mate. I appreciate your comments, That was really nice.
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your quite welcome
any time.
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EXCELLENT
It is always pleasing to read poetry that has that touch of humour to it. Far to much serious stuff around.Seems like even drunken mice love to end up fighting (do they learn it from watching drunken males go at it after a few jars?) Excellent piece a pleasure to have clicked on and read Thank you
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Thank you so much, Legend. It is such an honour to get a comment from you. I'm stoked! I guess that poor little mouse was probably seeing double. Good thing he had Rover watching over him. Thank you again.
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That's very cute. I've seen an intoxicated cat on occasion but never a mouse. It's a lovely written rhyme. Happy trails.
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Thanks, mate. I appreciate your comments as always.
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awww this is so cute!
it is very whimsical, i love the flow, its such an amazing write.
OH! i really like that picture. it is so cute!
your Faerie
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Thanks, mate. I am so glad you liked this piece. Much appreciated are your comments.
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Dear Condor
What a cute poem! Is that your pc's mouse?
When I see stuff like that I'm ashamed that I ever ate meat.
Nice poem. I hope a broader and younger audience gets to see this adorable story.
Great job!
John
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Hi. Thanks for reading this. I like your sense of humor. My pc mouse. I wish! I use to have two mice once when i was younger. They were absolutely adorable.
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i absoluetly LOVED this! i hate mice, but must say this is both funny and cute. Keep it up! I never get bored of your poetry
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Glad you liked it. I use to have pet mice and i think they are adorable.
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This is a really cute write. Poor little Gypsy will have quite a hangover the next day. Think he'll learn his lesson? Great job. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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Thanks, mate. I fear though this piece may need a little work before i will be totally happy with it.
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