A trip on a plane led to rapid descent;
a small bag of Quickrete turned to cement;
twelve years of bliss for a life of lament;
when you said, "I do," at our covenant,
in hindsight, I didn't know what you meant.
A contest entry
- My Favorite Mistake by breedluv.
1750 points, ended December 9, 2008, 14 entries
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"twelve years of bliss for a life of lament;
when you said, "I do," at our covenant,
in hindsight, I didn't know what you meant."
Those lines are beautifully sorrowful. Writes such as this tug at the heart and I welcome that. Wonderfully done!
Safely hidden in the darkness,
~ The Rocker Who Lost All
By the way, I figured quickrete was cement lol.
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Yes, I know what quickrete is. Interesting little poem, well done, and thanks for your entry.
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Nice rhyme indeed. I am not sure what quickrete is. I wish you luck in the contest. Best of luck to you in all your future writes.
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nice rhyming.
Just googled Quickrete... never heard of that before.
I hope you will be able to smile over my ignorance. -
This is a nicely rhymed lament. In the words of 'Bubbah' - I feel your pain. Best of luck in the contest.
Mike
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