I was riding the bumper of an old pick-up truck.
Running late for a meeting, that’s my kind of luck.
With no chance to pass on a thin curvy road,
I pounded the wheel just about to explode.
An old country farmer simply out for a ride.
Two sheep in the back and a dog by his side.
Forced into a pace I considered too slow,
I watched as his dog put on quite a show.
As though the first time he’d ridden before,
or last and would not get to ride anymore.
His excitement was simply intriguing to me.
He stretched out his head like a captain at sea.
He hung out so far holding on with his paws.
His ears flapped behind in constant applause.
His tongue hanging out like a Jordanesque move,
with nothing held back and nothing to prove.
He bounced back and forth, giving each side a try,
when I noticed a chance to pass passed me by.
This dog was enthused about being alive,
while I had been struggling to merely survive.
So, I stuck out my head as far as I could.
The wind in my face; he was right, it felt good.
If anyone watched, I’m sure it looked strange.
It was nice to enjoy letting loose for a change.
I learned a great lesson from that old gray hound.
The world is amazing if you just look around.
As things turned out it was a very lucky day,
except for the bug that I swallowed on the way.
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LOL The end had me laughing. Actually the whole thing had me laughing. LOL I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest
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Ha, good job. It is a lovely poem and it's good to see that you finally got rewarded for it! Yeah, I've done that bug swallowing routine too! Blech!!!
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Funny
I've seen this dog before.It seems they find a spot where there lips flap real good and that is there favorite position.I have tried this too but I dont talk much and didnt like my lips flapping like that.Now my wife she loves to flap her lips.She would be a good dog.Get your cool feeling going again you made me giggle a little.
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HAHAHAHAHA!!
this is amazing
i luvd it !
thank u for writing about dogs..i luv em !!
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Very cute. Your rhyme worked well and the whole thing flowed very smoothly. Thank you for entering. -
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Danna, I appreciate your time very much... and what a cool feeling or a writer to actually make someone laugh, much less, LMAO... thanks - Kevin
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LOL...
Congrats! hahaha...you got me (lol). I loved this funny, witty piece. The imagery worked well and I think I was about 2 car lenths behind you staring up at the hawks flying by (that was me swerving into the corn) - just kidding. Your's is the first humor piece I read in this contest...you gave me my first laugh for the evening. Thank you for that; very inventive.
AsIThink...
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thanks
for your enthusiastic review... I love people that enjoy life... btw, I really like your screenname - Kevin
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There's always a bug somewhere, isn't there? But that doesn't keep us from enjoying the wonderful feeling of being alive, even if we must learn the lesson from a dog... thanks for entering.
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cute
nice response, I like it... "bugs" ... without them... life would be easy, and what fun would that be??? - kevin
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LOL This is a wonderful story poem and held my attention the entire was, from first line to last. I enjoyed the imagery too. Next time I see a dog in a truck, I'll think about this poem.
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LOL awww, I really enjoyed reading this; you made it so totally descriptive; without actually giving us the colouring of the dog, I could picture him in my head - huge tongue lolling carelessly out of his mouth, tail twitching behind him madly like a metronome gone out of control, and boundless energy as he dashing from one side to the other of the backseat rear of the truck, just thrilling in the chase even though he's in a vehicles on wheels - am i correct?
I couldn't pick out a favourite part of this poem; the whole thing just flowed so smoothly, that I read it as one; and truly liked each part. The only one line that niggled a little bit at me, was the very last one; I think you were inserting a little humour, and it *did* work - but ... I don't know, something about it says to me that it would have worked better if you had taken it seriously; like written something more profound to give the poem a real 'kick' at the end.
But, that's just personal opinion; this was great- thanks for entering!
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Wow, Thanks
I really appreciate your in depth review. And I am so glad you enjoyed it. You may be right about the "kick' at the end. I usually try to interject a moral, a punchline, or some kind of lesson in life. For some reason, the "bug" just struck me funny. I will consider an alternate ending... by the way, this is a true story (except for the bug) - Kevin
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