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Old Chief, Watching

Chrystaline orange vapor
hugging vast prairies
Goodbye to where
          I was.
Hello to
          where I am going.
Soil indelibly marked
            by
old dreams, fading.
Warrior reminding, given
to accounting of time
and dreams he will
          not let go.

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  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    December 18, 2008

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    HOODWINKED!

    Wolfie,

    Powerful imagery laced with an under current of whispering emotion. Great character study, Well Done! Congrats on the trophy!

    You have been Hoodwinked by your Poetic Bandit Family today because WE CARE!

    Brother Dennis


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    December 9, 2008

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    Oh this carries so much emaning...for me, for any reader..."A warrior reminding, given to accounting of time....." Absoltuely.


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    December 8, 2008

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    Great take...

    on the picture prompt & the story behind it! This so aptly describes it all. You really detailed it nicely in this piece. All the best in the Contest. write.