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Out of the corner of my tired eyes, I'm not surprised

Swallowing this hurt
From ocean to sky       
Fiction and reality collide
Sometimes it seems too quiet into paralyzing silence

I feel your eyes crawling over me
Im sitting in a room made up of only big white walls
You woke up, in pieces     
What a shame we all became such fragile, broken things

I use to be so quick so clever
There's a lot that I don't know
i guess the most that i can do is make a call and tell you the truth
Hoping i can run today and get away faster then ever from here
All the times i tried to steal my best for you

It’s cold in here feels like everything’s upside down
I've been awake for a while now
Familiar: oh, this sounds so familiar.
The waves are crashing down on me
Just a boy just a girl nothing left nothing left in this  world
These words this heart have hurt a lot
One more kiss could be the best thing

Author notes

iPod playlist poetry.
Put your music player [i.e. windows media player, itunes, winamp] on shuffle.
The first lines of the first twenty songs are your poem.
The 21st line is the title

[1]Krystal Meyers-Rescue Me
[2]Automatic Loveletter-The Answer
[3]Fireflight-You Decide
[4]Flyleaf-sorrow
[5]flyleaf-penholder
[6]Paramore-Fences
[7]Something corporate- this brokenheart
[8]Paramore-Let The Flames Begin lyrics
[9]Paramore-temporary
[10]Jack Mannequin-the resolution
[11]The starting line-playing favorites
[12]Hedley-never too late
[13]Mariana's trench -fix me
[14]George canyon-my name
[15]Colbie caillat-bubbly
[16]Carolyn dawn johnson-crybaby
[17]Fireflight-you gave me a promise
[18]Hannah combs-joshs song
[19]A Rocket To The Moon-the death of me
[20]3doors down-let me go
[21]Kate voegele-top of the world


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Comments

  • Good.


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    December 9, 2008

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    Wow... This is actually good, as it makes a lot more sense than mine did Well done & good luck!


  • Icarus
    December 8, 2008

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    Wow, that did go together really well It surprised me that it was iPlaylist Poetry.
    Well done and good luck