Under the blaze of a violent moon
Where the fog rolled in like a shadowy ghoul
Where the creatures of the dark danced a violent dance
And the Lord of Darkness had a necromance
They call me bad
But they don't know of my deepest intentions
The rape of man
The callous call demented rejection
They call me black
But to you the shit sticks, when the riots are over
Like a mildewed crack
With maggots feasting when the fucking is over
Excuse me,
Who screwed me
Raped the serpent in the shadows beneath me?
And who shows the darkest trueness
Under killers moons
With pregnant bellies, fullest....
They call me bad
But they don't know of my deepest intentions
The fall of Adam
Was merely a ploy to get my hands on Eden
They call me black
But screams are platinum when the violence is golden
At the fall of man
Hang the guilty with ropes of promises broken
Under the earth, in a crypt of doom
Mother Mary cries in the catacombs
A slip of soft linen flashes soft, dead skin
As the creature slithers in
Come through me
Undo me
Rip the rotting flesh off bone and rebuild me
But who shows the truest darkness
Under killers moon
Zombie children, miscarried
They call me Hell
But they don't know of my deepest intentions
To their knees, they fell
Blackened hearts told of hatreds infestations
They call me Death
And in the darkness, as you slumber, I'll free you
Author notes
Thanks for reading and giving me the title, Rena 
Please tell me what you think
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rena gives good titles...
this is kinda pretty... (you really need to stop!) but it seems different to your usual stuff... even though i've read it before >)_( -
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It IS pretty isn't it?
What can i say, I like being me.... I'm The Big Dog for a reason...lol
'D' (Scott)
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i know i liked this one, you got better and better, keep it flowing my friend, keep it flowing
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Thanks
I intend to keep it flowing...and I'll do my best to keep churning out writes that people like.
'D'
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They call me bad
But they don't know of my deepest intentions
The rape of man
The callous call demented rejection
or
They call me Hell
But they don't know of my deepest intentions
To their knees, they fell
Blackened hearts told of hatreds infestations
Both of those are amazing! I love this!
It is so... deep.
Great work!
~~Gwen
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and comment on this piece.
I had fun writing this, it came together pretty well. Glad you enjoyed this piece.
'D'
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awesome...
very well written and cynical piece
but can we expect any less from D ?
i think not
the first and seventh stanza are my favorites
because they are so gentle in image and make this piece a bit hypnotic, and mind fucking
great write, and youre very welcome
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Thank you Rena
What can you expect from D...Hmmm, you should be asking 'What can't be expected from D'
Glad you like this, and thanks for reading and for giving me the title
'D'
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Killer Write
Okay I am in 100% agreence with sis down below cept I can not say this is your best write ever as I don't have a truly best write I love of yours but damn this is fdefinitely one of the better writes I have read from you and likewise any other dark writer. any ways I really love the sadistic darkness inked through out this write and what really got me was how graphic and moving this poem is with your use of such deep methaphorical phrasing through out. I like Rena's poem title as well as it fits and its quite cleverly done too. any ways the images I get after reading this poem leave me in a tailspin of a dark cruel cold hearted world. any ways excellent write as always bro and keep up the damn fine work
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Thanks Tiger, Bro
Yeah...this is one of my darker writes, and the idea Rena had of completely throwing the reader off with the title...excellent, lol.
Glad you like this write, and thanks for commenting.
I guess D is back....and the world better watch the fuck out....lol
'D'
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Well, I dont think I really need to copy everything I've already told you about this poem into this comment box. though it would probably get me a few extra points.
It's overall pretty damn good, just gotta fix up those few things (if you want that is, they were just suggestions) and whoop whoop.
Good Write, keep writing and hugzz
XoXo Claire-Anne XoXo
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Thanks Claire-Anne
No, you don't have to repost the comments, lol and I'll take them into consideration
Glad you like this though, and thanks for taking the time to read and comment
'D'
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Damn but I so Love this one! In fact I think its my favorite one by you so far. Its like the serpent telling his story about how he took Eden away from Adam and Eve. Brilliantly written D
NS
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Thank you Bell
I had fun writing this piece...it seemed to flow pretty easily.
Glad you like it and thanks for commenting.
'D'
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