Its down
to the safety of all the boots on the ground
like starving shepherds in full flocks at midnight
a quick smile and a nod
to the wolves silently harbored
in the deep cut valleys below
Hunger clouded by ear-shout missions
Reciprocitous silence usually comes with a glint
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nice piece
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you are actually after the adjective form of the noun 'reciprocity' ... you may use either 'riciprocity of' or 'reciprocitous' ... either way would be correct
fyi
i love this minimalist poem ... it is sayin a whole bunch of stuff ..
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Thankyou. thankyou, THANKYOU! I've kept coming back to look at it again and again, treating it like a bad accident, intrigued by the carnage, yet afraid to really look.
All the best to you.
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Ambushed and bushwhacked. The state of all shepherds, perhaps, when its time for the wolves to howl.
Reciprotous is quite the word!
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Hah! is reciprotous even a word? I may have to rethink that wordd...:}
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I don't know, but I like it. So therefore it should be a word! lol
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well then "by the power of greyskull, it is a word!"
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Fodder for thought
perhaps the glint of the last days light on the steel of gods gun. If only the sheep could feed the spirit of the shepherd.
I rate this three bags full. yay!
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Automated products see only the program for which they are written. The only spirit would at last be attributed to a ghost in the machine.
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