C hrist was born on this day near the beautiful green holly hanging above.
H ow sweet the warm taste of the Light Golden Eggnog
R emember Frosty on these cold winter days
I nstitutional ways to teach young ones of the celebration
S ome look for Rudolph, some listen for bells of His sleigh
T insel wrapped around the christmas tree.. the sudden warmth that the lights give off
M iracualous wonders of what will arrive inderneath the tree
A ccusations of what that red box is, or the one wrapped in holly wrapping paper
S ome watch for happyness and joy
A contest entry
- Allpoetry Kids Christmas Bash 2008 (win a gold membership) by Little Eagle.
4200 points, ended January 11, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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There are a few spelling mistakes in this which have already been pointed out, I think that if you edited those this would flow better because the reader doesn't have to stop and fix them as they read
apart from that this is a lovely poem, clearly showing the joy and anticipation of Christmas
Merry Christmas!
Polly
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You have written an Acrostic here - starting with the letters that form the word "Christmas". Each line tells us something about Christmas. Very good.
Unfortunately you have made a few typos in it, which you can easily be corrected though.
In line 5: His should be "his".
In line 7: Miracualous should be "Miraculous" and
inderneath should be "underneath".
In line 9: happyness should be "happiness".
Have another look please.
Anna.
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Good luck in the contest it is really good.
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