I have this opportunity
To make you love me
To read all the wants within your eyes and fulfill them
To listen to your heart communicate your desires
This opportunity
Is now
To make you love me
And let you know
From this day forward
I will take
This opportunity
Author notes
This was cool - will I get the opportunity?
Prompt: Oppurtunity
A contest entry
- Word Prompt V - by Manda Kathryn.
400 points, ended December 14, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
starting over - need your thoughts
Comments
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the simplicity and honesty of this short poem is gently sweet, yet so nicely conveyed with all the emotional properties of love and long term commitment...i enjoyed the repetition of opportunity which reinforces a commitment to trying..
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Yes, a moment of opportunity offers pause for possitive thinking. Love the title and your uplifted spirit here. Congratulations on you honorable mention,
~Mary O
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What a beautiful opportunity this is; You expressed this lovely and I hope you get the chance
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Thank You for Your Entry & Best of Luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Thank U so much. I tried
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The simplicity and brevity are sweeping here poet. This is a breathtaking work filled with the essence of spirituality. If I were she, and not married, the opportunity would be yours.
I wish you well in the challenge. You used the prompt word with skill and knowledge of our craft!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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You are soooooooooooo great. makes me smile when ever u review my work. I always appreciate you view because its better than a "that was good, keep it up." Thanks 4 the love Renee - luv U more ; ) Mykeeeee
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kisses around the neck inbetween a a warm breath, with a hint of spearmint.
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Deep
This is a very deep poem, this poem can mean so many things, most would take this has a purely physical relationship but I think that this could be a spiritual relationship these too need time and oppurtunity, I could be wrong. Excellent write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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Thanks darling for your time
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This was too clear and too simply yet I like the wisdom you understanding your in control of love but...I disagree we are not in charge of love but it is God. the man tries to because women falls in love with emotions but it is everything the way he touch the look in his eyes his smile everything that creates emotions. Those things can be too much are too less for a women so therefore you can never know that right amount
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I agree - through God - all is possible - that is why if we have God within us, we have love within us and hopefully a women will see the goodness and love within the character which is in essence what God has always been. But I like how you broke this down. Thanks for your thoughts.
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beautiful peace...the words vibrate with your sentiments.
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Thank you so much - trying to build back the feel of what I thought was lost
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I like this title...gives a real 'heartbeat' to the text. And the smooth new take on a 'proposal' is kickin too! Best wishes in the contest. Deserves a silver at minimum, in my humble opinion...Peace, Rhonda
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thank you - trying to get back into the swing of things
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Hey this one really rocks son, and If all guys took their oppurtunity gracfully as these words; there would be some very happy ladies....excellent write...Mom
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Thanks mom - a briief though before i can really start putting some longer thoughts together.
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