I watch you from afar, a distance greater then the ocean
A strong branch that beckons my thundering essence
Leaving me breathless and panting in hidden need
In a state of endurance, your senses linger
My downfall, I follow thee to the unknown
Your laughter draws a crowd, a shadow-
Like a knight’s sword, I fight by your side
Strong but able, making me restless
Panting and craving, slowly anticipating
Your graceful moves, I slay
In my dreams you are near, a breath upon my cheek
I open my eyes; you are gone, the wind blowing
My curtains, and the tides are tenderly calling my name.
I feel the setting sun, seeking relief
A new day, maybe the day I wish to articulate…
You speak and all–captivated by your words
Masculine, harsh but your smiles hold the softness
I wish to hear and feel, pulling from that energy
Wishing for more, your eyelashes slowly caressing
My stolen heart, I belong to you.
I am fascinated by your fundamental nature
Hidden from the world, watching you,
I see you- your essence, my love slowly
Waiting for you, will linger until the day you realize
Things left unsaid, love left unreturned, I draw closer…
A contest entry
- Shh - Don't tell anyone by Suzanne Dia.
3500 points, ended January 5, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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This is a beautiful poem - I like that you have portrayed such a strong love
I think that the "thee" in the first stanza sounds a little out of place, because you don't use language like that any other time in the poem - but that is just an observation I loved the last line of this - it shows that you are never going to give up!
♦ M
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lol thank you... the whole idea of using thee was supposed to make u think back.. kind of like the crush that i have as always been there, before we even ever set eyes on each other ... the ending i follow thee to the unknown is saying i wasn't there or don't know how people talk back then but i'll follow u to wathever... hope it work.
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The love you show here is really good.So sad that they do not know what you are feeling.Maybe some day.Good luck in this contest.
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