you stood there,with your eyes so bare
I could not see past you
you took my hand,made me understand
your love for me was true
under the starry sky,I can't deny
your presence turns me to a dune
we stood on the shores,in lover's galore
gazing at the white moon
we stood beside,ready for the ride
the stars would take us on
through endless space,awaiting a new place
where our love would flourish beyond.
through blue paint,with no complaint
we took the ride together
the canvas in the sky,was a feast to our eyes
we would remember this painting forever.
Author notes
Anagha Nataraj
a love painted poem !
A contest entry
- I've a Romantic Notion. . . by JinSays.
640 points, ended December 13, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Las Estrellas! by sol-luna.
800 points, ended March 30, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do u think of my poem ?
Comments
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Great
I think the colours of your wording were as vivid as the picture you painted.
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Very pretty.
I think you did a splendid job here, you've painted soft and lovely, and very very sweetly.
Love always,
Jin
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I like
great job good luck in the contest
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