Farewell! O great one...
I shall call you when the seashells are in bloom.
When they scatter o'er the seashore as do toadstools 'round a tomb.
When they glow like tiny candles 'midst the gathering of gloom,
I shall call you when the seashells are in bloom.
We shall dance upon the sand dunes, you and I,
while a moon of alabaster sails the oceans of the sky.
To the whispers of the wavelets, to the seagull's haunted cry,
we shall dance upon the sand dunes, you and I.
We shall love beyond the bonds of surly time.
To the peaks of passioned pleasure ev'ry measure shall we climb.
To unravel ev'ry riddle we shall raddle ev'ry rhyme;
We shall love beyond the bonds of surly time.
When the time has come when we must say goodbye.
When the moon is hanging helpless in the tatters of the sky.
When there's no more joy in loving, when no tears are left to cry.
Then the time has come when we must say goodbye.
I shall call you when the seashells are in bloom.
When they light their lambent lanterns whilst they gambol 'round my tomb.
We shall meet, once more, in Kadath. We shall play the Game of Doom.
I shall call you when the seashells are in bloom.
Author notes
Written for the farewell of Great Cthulhu
Warranted to comply with Rule #93
A Monorhyme, aaaa bbbb cccc xxxx
et cetera, et cetera and so forth...
Thanks to:
KevinDunn, for the seashells
Draig Aine, for 'Kelp'
H.P.Lovecraft, for 'Dream Quest of Unknown Kadath', Cthulhu Mythos
Morticia Addams~wherever you are
A contest entry
- A Grand Farewell to All Poetry by Great Cthulhu.
1735 points, ended December 27, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
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650 points, ended March 1, 27 entries
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Comments
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You were right. Very much enjoyed this.
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Lovely rhythm and blues. I could almost smell the sea.
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M, sometimes I like to revisit some things that have made my day. This was one, and you know that the other is.... 'Less than lovers'. Let me say that you write like an angel and that, whenever I am sad, you seem to post such a feeling good IM. Thank you.......... best love, 'Chessie'
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This is gorgeous! ( but then again I see Ea said that already!) "When the seashells are in bloom" What a wonderful image! You certainly deserved the trophy!
What a challenging rhyme scheme magnificently realized!
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What a sadly beautiful piece. Thank u for entering.
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What a wonderful poem filled with love and expectation of reuniting. It's beautifully written, filled with emotion and glorious in it's illustrations.
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A most amazing an superlative piece! I doubt if Kipling could have done as well! An absolutely glorious and wonderful write--exceptional! I loved it!
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Picky me says it's not aaaa, but aaaa bbbb cccc etc, but who cares - it's a good piece of work.
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My goodness, I've never heard monorhymes sound so natural and unobtrusive. What a wonderful poem you have penned here. Just a pure joy to read and ponder this poetic tour-de-force. BRAVO!!!
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none of the rhymes seemed forced!
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Outstanding "I shall call you when the seashells are in bloom." Outstanding second stanza, beautiful "moon of alabaster sails the oceans of the sky" and lovely alliteration of "whispers of the wavelets," "peaks of passioned pleasure," and "light their lambent lanterns." Poignant "seagull's haunted cry." Very nice "bonds of surly time." Excellent "moon is hanging helpless in the tatters of the sky."
Outstanding word selection, beautiful alliteration that enhances rather than distracts, excellent rhyme and meter. A delight to read!
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This is gorgeous! Absolutely flawless cadence - when the seashells are in bloom - is that what people say? I've never lived by the sea but that is so appealing!
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Wunderbar!
This is my favorite line: "We shall love beyond the bonds of surly time." Impressive verse in rhyme, thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Keening and utterly gorgeous. My goodness, but you're good. The two 'moon' lines are my favourite. I love the idea of a seashell in bloom. xx
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This is wonderful poetry. Perfect rhyme and rhythm, beautiful imagery and a deep sadness that colours each stanza beyond the words.
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