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Just Another Bad Hair Day

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1.   Her thoughts are like a mess of clothes piled on her bed
      rather than hanging inside the closet.
2.   She pulled out her favorite chair on her vanity.
3.   A scent of lemon airfreshener's in the air with the ac on,

      touched her forehead to check for fever

      then dab on some cherry lip balm in front of her mirror,

      hearing nothing outside...
4.   and then danced in silence.
5.   "Gerry is in Dover...somewhere over there," she thought so...
6.   She had her ipod with earphones on to keep neighbors from
      breaking their eardrums with nonstop plays

      of her Last Song Syndrome. She kept dancing...
7.   A bad hair day with a new haircut.
8.   sighed, "oh well, www.whenever,wherever,whatever harhar"
9.   signed in...online, in an offline mode
10. It's raining cats and dogs, aren't they?
11.  on a silly frou frou day
12.  to feel like thirteen inside a thirty year old woman;
       now looking like a hag.
13.  with a black thong in a ratty short
14. Ling is not wearing any blingbling ring.
15.  She will not  fall in love with an

      unattainable guy and will stay single for the rest of her life
      sipping lychee martini in a bubblebath

16. These fairytale tendencies in her head
17. Only made hug her pillow and blush in bed
18. que sera sera
19. though Yoda said,"There is no try, only do," 
      with Yoda's didactic inside her head, she
stood up,

      picked herself where she last left it.
20. now the clothes found their place in the laundry basket
      out from dress-me-ups.

 

 

 

 

[photo by severus tenebaum]

Author notes

just for fun

Hi Ms. P

I don't know if I followed the instructions right
I just wanted to show you your contest has inspired
me to write this

 


Twenty Little Poetry Projects – an exercise from Jim Simmerman.

Fool around. Enjoy. Don’t feel obliged to make rational sense. This is an exercise. It’s not as difficult as it sounds at first, and you will surprise yourself!

1. Begin the poem with a metaphor.
2. Say something specific but utterly preposterous.
3. Use at least one image for each of the five senses.
4. Use one example of synaesthesia (mixing the senses)
5. Use the proper name of a person and the proper name of a place.
6. Contradict something you said earlier in the poem.
7. Change direction or digress from the last thing you said.
8. Use a word (slang?) you’ve never seen in a poem.
9. Use an example of false cause/effect logic.
10. Use a piece of “talk” you’ve actually heard (preferably in dialect and/or which you
don’t understand).
11. Create a metaphor using the following construction; “The (adjective) (concrete
noun) of (abstract noun)…”
12. Use an image in such a way as to reverse its usual associative qualities.
13. Make the persona or character in the poem do something he/she could not do in
real life.
14. Refer to yourself by nickname and in the third person.
15. Write in the future tense so that part of the poem seems to be a prediction.
16. Modify a noun with an unlikely adjective.
17. Make a declarative assertion that sounds convincing but that finally makes no
sense.
18. Use a phrase from a language other than English.
19. Make a non-human object say or do something human (personification).
20. Close the poem with a vivid image that makes no statement, but that “echoes’ an image from earlier in the poem.

 

 




 

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  • savemysoul
    October 9

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    i really enjoyed this. it's really different then what i'm used to but it was fantastic

  • yep

    Anna Lee, this is definitely a favorite of mine out of many I've read by others here at AP. I specifically love lines 1, 7, and 20. Liked it all quite a bit. Great Work! I think you should give your writing a little more credit you're good.


  • chilali
    December 24, 2008

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    Ooh! I like this. Very different but great! Thank you for sharing

    Much love
    Ylova


  • poeticweaver gold member
    December 6, 2008

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    You're a trip!

    But I love your way sweet soul!
    Much love and light, Timothy


  • usefuldistraction
    December 6, 2008
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    This is a delightful piece. Who says poetry has to be all serious and stuff like that. Nice write.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    l.o.l.

    utter nonsense! l.o.l. but it was very entertaining! i like this my friend! lots of luck in the contest!


    • ariazephyrzoe gold member
      December 5, 2008
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      Thanks Rich, glad you enjoyed it. quite enjoyed it too though I had quite a headache with it as well lol


  • bigperm gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    tough criteria...lol

    I was slow to catch on, but the poem looks like it was fun. I caught myself looking back and fourth to see what true meanings were behind each line once I read the AN.


  • Mr Id
    December 5, 2008

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    Wow- what a crazy pormpt! Your worked well with it though- nice work!

    This is very interesting and exciting stuff- thnaks for sharing! X


  • Yemassee gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    "on a silly frou frou day"

    I used to make fun of Mariza about her frou frou hair. But it's not really frou frou anymore...she took all the fun out of it!

    It'a abstract in some ways, though the general theme is quite clear...her life is a lot like most peoples...fragmented and not quite how she'd like it to be. Words work here, allusive little devils whose meaning is what we choose for them to be, like "and then danced in silence" each reader has his own vision of what and how that plays out.

    It looks like an interesting contest, certainly the formatting is...and I like how you've woven all these requirements into a coherent piece...you did well Yoda. I never really saw Star Wars but I would imagine no woman wants to look like Yoda...no matter how wise he was...so replace that with a nice looking female from Star Wars...


  • Ken-Maverick
    December 5, 2008

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    Now this is someone way out of the mundane.
    but i liked it anyway, its always nice to have a read of something completely different
    Well done

    All the best to you in the contest

    Ken


  • just mercedes gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    Oh yes, I think this is a fun poem, shows me the thoughts of a playful person wondering about life. I like it - I hope you enjoyed writing it. I most liked the www line - great! Thank you for this entry.

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