Viscious motions of repressed emotions,
subtle release with enviroments plagued with filth,
I drift across the line of confirmation,
wishing I could choose a side.
Time elapses in uneven jumps,
accomadated by rising, falling, pushing, pulling,
voices of yearning confused,
speak to the air: not listening,
just waiting for their turn to speak.
Demands and reprimands charge across my ears,
too bright lights illuminate discomfort,
rays shattered off the drones of shells,
doubly false,
the rectify this infernal noise,
in form of conversion,
allocation.
Yet here I sit lost amid a sea,
not 'the', for many host ships,
worthy of gazing winds,
upon which I rest,
alone.
All I wish is for these rolling waves to cease,
the water to drain from my lungs,
become a strandee,
calling the salt I breathed when I was,
underneath.
Author notes
It's about my hatred of a rowdy science class with a horrible naggy teacher who just won't recognize when she's beaten.
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haha, the authors notes made me smile. (: i have a teacher like that. she drives me up the wall. man, i wish i could read this to her. (:
great work!
my favorite lines:
All I wish is for these rolling waves to cease,
the water to drain from my lungs,
become a strandee,
calling the salt I breathed when I was,
underneath.
wonderful, wonderful, wonderful. (:
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Wow so much, just from a teacher, very impresive! The intense feeling and they way you sculpted your words, really adds more to the power, great job
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Rage Much?
I can definetly see how she angers you, and I can also see through the poem that she has a strong Ego. Probably realizes on the inside that shes completely wrong about something, but refuses to let that show through because then her Pride will shatter. Im not much with interpretation*, but it seems "Speak to air" is speaking to someone who won't see any perspective other than their own, making your opinion worthless to them
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You exactly right, and thank you so much for the feedback
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Wow.
This is very good.
If you didnt have your author notes, I would say there is much hidden meaning, but you hide it in a way that is personal, and yet, the reader does not mind because it is still beautiful to read.
Your a very talented write, and I would like to get to know you. -
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Thank you very much. My life has been pretty busy lately, but I'd like to have a conversation or two with you too if the chance arrises.
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wow,it's kool.
me likes, awesomeness!
Freiden,
Liebe,
und Tokio Hotel
~Kiwi
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oooh wow
This is awesome. the flow was awesomer. and yea, i really like the word choice here. clever word choice, just fits this poem perfectly. imagery was intense. great wrtie, keep penning
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Science class? Seems like more than just a science class. Like the BIGGEST nightmare possible
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Thanks
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Im the First
GREAT BIG WORDS you are using. this is great LOVE it.. NICE JOB
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