i tried so many times
i gave you so many chances
i gave you chance after chance
and u abused them time and time again
you got caught every time
one goes by two, three, four, five
and still i give you a chance
i gave it all to you
just for you to time and time again
rip out my heart and throw it on the ground
i thought you really cared
i thought you really loved me
but in reality all you wanted
was to hurt me time and time again
the last time i couldn't take it
i told you...this was it
i told you no more
and you lost something you will never have again
you lost me!
Author notes
1) Love- Write about being cheated on... Everyone hates cheaters and liars... I would love to read this write because i have experienced it before!!!
A contest entry
- *~!~*LOTS OF OPTIONS!!! Love-Sad-Happy- Rhyme COME SEE*~!~* by Shannon62875.
500 points, ended December 29, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
im not to great but what do u think?
Comments
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the last time i couldn't take it
i told you...this was it
i told you no more
and you lost something you will never have again
you lost me!
Kudos to you for your strength and a tear for your pain.
In this write it sounds to me as if you found something special through losing something special.
Breaking up after being with someone for a long period of time is always painful.
I am sorry for your loss but like I said it sounds as if you found yourself and your worth.
Inspirational and moving
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WOW!!!
This was a very good write.. I can somewhat relate to this though... You did a great job with the flow and it was an excellent piece... You have so much anger and hurt in this write... however, you didnt follow the rules when i said number ONE was MUST RHYME!!!! I cant another one so ill keep this one too but next time maybe you should read the rules..
Shannon*Leah
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wow!
wow this is deep and understanding! I've been cheated on several times and I was the one to be blamed. My favorite line "the last time i couldn't take it
i told you...this was it
rip out my heart and throw it on the ground"
both lines so much emotion. Love it! -
I really like this and my favorite part i "rip out my heart and throw it on the ground".
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