You stand in front of a mirror
Only nothing is clearer.
Understand those thoughts you dream,
Reality makes you want to scream.
Ever wishing for something to become yours
Yearning now, do get out of the downpour.
Ever searching for the easy way home
Sensible decisions made often leave you alone.
Shy images dance before you,
Eyes see everything, but I ignore you.
Envisage who you really are- I implore you!
My rationality depends on that reflection,
Entrapment depends entirely on perfection.
The justification of the person I see...
Reality makes a fool out of me, it
Excludes the use of silence, leaves
Me alone, and my self violence...
But seeing you when I'm seeing me, makes
Love worthwhile, when it's meant to be.
Echoes of laughter will now follow me.
(When will my image be the one to set me free?)
Author notes
This is (at the moment) known as a triple threat. It's an acrostic, a word acrostic and a poem. Basically, there's a message straight down the left hand side, spelled out. There's another if you read the first word of every line. And then there's the poem as a whole.
I mixed options 1, and 5. Eyes/Mirrors, and Trembling.
In a list
A contest entry
- Something a Little Bit Different by SomeGirlYouKnew.
1200 points, ended December 14, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this is amazing! i realized as i read that there was a message on the left side going down but i did not put the first words of every line together until you pointed it out. i love the message it is really deep... great write im looking forward to more of your stuff
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This is definitely 'something a little bit different!' A most intriguing read. I love the mix of poetry forms you have used here. Bravo!
Mariana
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AWSOME
Ever wishing for something to become yours , yearning now do get out of the downpour...gives some hope...but I loved it all flowing with a message and loved the clever spelling on the side, blessings. How' s mum's total healing?
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Second line I think it would sound better if you said more clear instead of clearer...nothing wrong with that as far as I know but just think it'd sound better. But just my opinion
"Reality makes you want to scream"
Been there...
Line 6 did you mean to say do or to get out of the downpour?
Overall great imagery!
Keep it up doll
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i like this a lot. the rhyming is well done as is the rhythm.
and i love the acrostic part.
good luck in my contest and thank you for entering ^_^ -
hehehe you are getting so cheeky and clever!! how do you find the words within urself like that? I wish I was as wordy as that if you understand what I mean. The word acrostic is FAB!!!! I just love the idea but it'd take too muc thought for me to manage that and a flowing poem and a normal acrostic....me stay basic i thinks xx
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