June though August just makes me gag.
A day is forever with hours that drag,
and dogged heat that makes my hair droop,
humidity feels like I'm breathing soup.
Finally when Autumn decides to arrive,
it finds me still here, but just barely alive.
I'm all but lost, in a sweat-nasty funk
too hard to find amidst summertime junk.
I don't get those people who rue the day
that they have to throw their June crap away.
I, however, have a chesshire cat smile,
while tossing each floatie in swift growing pile-
"From sunscreen to towels, it all goes away
shoved deep in a closet, forgotten til May,
replaced by hoods and cherished long sleeves
for warmth in fall, hot chocolate and leaves."
Now another thing that I have to say:
my favorite part of a winter's day
is curling up with an old dog earred book,
and warm piece of pie only mama can cook.
And last but not least, well worth the wait,
when returning home from a dinner date-
that seductive chill sure makes great excuse
to really put lover's soft lips to use!
A contest entry
- For allpoetry by the Winklings. #162 All welcome by Lyndon.
3220 points, ended February 15, 11 entries
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550 points, ended February 11, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - REWRITE CONTEST (NO, IT’S NOT A TYPO) by KayJay.
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What did you think
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A warm and witty write to be sure... it brought a smile and memories. Unfortunately, I can't tell if this is a rewrite and whether or not it's better or worse than before. (Rule 2
) Regardless, this is a wonderful poem and I enjoyed the read. Best of luck.
Ken
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Oh dear ...
Good poem but it is not Free Verse. The first sentence of this contest stipulates that.
You have written quatrains of pairs of rhyming couplets which is rhymed verse and not free verse.
So sorry.
Ron. 
A Winkler.
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Thanks for entering, hehe
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not funnny...
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I love the sultriness of summer, but mainly when I'm able to be at the coast. I much prefer Autum.
You have good images penned here that show why you can't wait for summer to end. And your meter and rhyme is pretty good, I just have a little question as to why you changed your format from rhyming couplets to a quatrain and then extremely long rhyming couplets once again toward the end.
May I suggest a quick edit for presentation sake, to make your lines more coherent.
Other that that, this is very good. Thank you for joining in the fun, best wishes!
many blessings, Sandi
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honestly, ill tell you its because i don't really know HOW to write poetry, i just do it. I would love to know more about different forms and consistency but at this point i just write what sounds good with what im feeling. im trying to expand my thoughts to include things like this though. any suggestions?
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I can't wait till the winter is gone. I have enjoyed your take on the time of the year. The rhyme is very nice made me think of a summer breeze. Good luck in the contest.
Greetings Herman
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oo great write here
your flow and rhyme was excellent,
Best luck in the contest
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oo great write here
your flow and rhyme was excellent,
Best luck in the contest
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although I hate winter...i loved your write! lol.
June though August makes me gag.
A day is forever and hours just drag.
A dogged heat that makes hair droop.
Humidity feels like trying to breathe soup.
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thanks for entering my contest, i love how you have this put together, its a great piece. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing and good luck.
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Once is enought indeed!
All things are defined through contrast and you do it well.
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Wow
wow amazing job i love it i love the whole thing nothing to compalin about i really love the whole thing its a great write because it come from the heart and i love poetry with alot of emotion i am going to add you to my favs and put you on my front page if u like ok well good job keep it up keep on going stay true stay sic peace out and have a nice day
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thank you so much for your flattery! Yeah, i'd love to be on your page! I'm skippin on over to look at your work here in a sec.
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In the very first line, is 'though' supposed to be 'through'? that confused me. besides that, great write!
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This was a great poem!! It made me smile the whole time I was reading it! I totally love the winter and can relate to this. Thanks for entering and good luck!
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lol i loved the last two lines there great good luck in my contest
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Love it!
How true this is. Especially down under. A dogged heat that makes hair droop.
Humidity feels like trying to breathe soup.
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ha ha i really like this poem especially the last two lines! they make me smile alot cause thats what my boyfriend always says is now that its cold we have to be really close and then he throws in there that your genitals are the warmest part of you bodies ha ha ... great write and i do think you should keep on writing 'happy' poetry it will make you happy too!
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--I love Winter--
And I love this.
**Nice.Job**
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I am so with you on the summer thing. I t gets hot around here. I love the winter much better and I love how you expressed it. Good Job!
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Season's of change
Winter sure does bring us a little closer
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