This is the story of Bethany Boo,
So brave and smart like Doctor Who.
She one day wondered what to do,
When over head some spaceships flew.
Suddenly she heard a squall,
As colour drained from one and all.
The flowers, grass and trees so tall,
The people, cats and mice so small.
Beth just stared with nowt to say
Across the lands and far away.
‘Why did they have to come today?
And make our world so drab and grey.'
So now she sees the spaceships land,
Upon the beach amidst the sand,
Alien creatures, hand in hand
March out in two’s so proud and grand.
Hearing now the people cry,
Beth decides to question why
‘With colour gone, you would deny
Our happy thoughts, oh my, oh my…
Their leader frowns in lost surprise,
‘We’re moving in’ he says and sighs.
‘You see, the colour hurts our eyes,
And soon no more the sun will rise.’
‘You can’t do that, you ugly creep,
An endless night will make us weep,
Without our light, we’ll only sleep’
So Beth dug in her pocket deep.
Out comes a box of rainbow dips,
She spreads the candy on her lips,
And puts her hands upon her hips,
‘It's time to go, you bunch of drips’
They shield their eyes and start to hiss,
They run and fear her rainbow kiss,
Back to their ship for drabbest bliss,
And maybe give the Earth a miss.
Spaceships leaving two by two,
As red and green and brown and blue,
Return and bathe the Earth anew,
The world is saved by Bethany Boo.
In a list
A contest entry
- Write a poem about the picture by BethanyBoo.
700 points, ended December 18, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Childrens Poems by Rovingone.
1200 points, ended March 20, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Children's Writes by Viyanna Rosemarie.
500 points, ended March 20, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Chicken a la Boynton by WaterChild Reborn.
1550 points, ended October 20, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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my son joel eight loved this
T
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I found this very entertaining and admire your skillful mono-rhyme scheme and flowing narrative. My cojudge, unfortunately, was unable to sit through this in its entirity. He did love the picture, though, and asked so many questions about it that I ended up paraphrasing the story for him. Naturally, he took from that his own interpretation and so is now convinced that his Aunt "Beth" Elizabeth went on a "car trip" with Dr. Who in the TARDIS and kissed an dalek with candy lips... or something like that.
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This is an adorable little piece bro.
I loved it
very deserviong of the gold.
Keep the ink flowing
Fire
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Awww so sweet!
This is so adorable!!
~Pastel
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i would like to thank you for the entry into the contest for my grandson and to wish you the best of luck in the judging process. viyanna rosemarie
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That's origonal. I loved the different colored space ships. Hooray for Bethany Boo!
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aww big brother this is truly adorable!!! I so enjoyed this piece it was so much fun reading about Bethany Boo!!!! You did an incredible job with this piece!!!! I love u soooo much!!! Well done!!!!
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oh what a treat
great stuff well deserving of the shiny
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Absolutely wonderful to read.
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Spaceships leaving two by two,
As red and green and brown and blue,
Return and bathe the Earth anew,
The world is saved by Bethany Boo.
Brave Bethany Boo!!! This is just enchanting! I loved the rhymes that gave this a unique flow and feel...and the story line is well thought out and comes together so nicely! The pic could not be any more perfect for this write. I will be reading this to my grand-daughter...she will LOVE it! Very nice job my creative friend!!! BRAVO!
Az
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Made me smile *S*...I can see her in the Tardis with Doctor Who. With your poem she should be a new character in his adventures. loved it
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haha loved it
Sweet sugar lips of hundred and thousands
then came your amazing poem
Good luck to you hun
Best wishes
Julie x
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My dear talented brother
this was truly fantastic and gave me a real giggle
are you showing your soft side?
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thank you very much. i love that poem. i liked the way you made every line rhyme and thanks for saying that i saved the world. thanks again. i liked thata you made it pretty.
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This really is great, Fritz, your rhyming is brilliant and the whole thing is perfect for the photo, such fun. This is worthy of going into any childs collection of poems. How can it not win!!??!!
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This appeals to the little girl in me in several ways. Quite clever and your rhyming is spot on. Lovely. Good luck in the contest!
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Am sure children would be enchanted by the lyrical delivery and the creative Bethany Boo who dispels the dark by adding the colours of a rainbow kiss! T
Why not suggest this character to the BBC for a new character for Dr. Who too, you could stretch the scenario to the Doctor having to travel to CandyLapland and having to fend of aliens made of aspartamane to find the true sugar source to make the sweet colours for Bethany Boo's peaceful premise! A delightful write dear poet.
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Hehe this is fantastic hunni! The rhyme is superb! Love the story told, mine would have loved something like this when younger
Such a creative tale, good luck in the contest
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Oh! I am so excited to have read this tonight, I was feeling down in the dumps and this fine piece by you made everything seem okay. Thanks!
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haha loved it ..... took it to the level with the rainbow dips lol delightful. hope you win. - T
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Oh my word! This is just adorable! She is going to LOVE it! Such a clever story to have written from the picture! It made me laugh out loud, and she always has sweets in her pocket, so we will be safe from any future alien invasions!
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