I can’t evade what I’ve made-
my own darkness seems to raid.
Knowing You ‘till I’m blue,
yet the true seems to fade.
What I want-what I do.
One’s of flesh and one’s of You.
Claim the Name-take the aim.
Then I’m left in the blue.
Seeks to hold me
and keep me from the One who holds my breath.
I am locked in
and brings about in me a spiritual death.
It's still remains-like my skin.
Takes away the light I’ve gained.
But I wait-to end this fate
called by a higher Name.
Seeks to hold me
and keep me from the One who holds my breath.
I am locked in
and brings about in me a spiritual death.
It still follows
It seeks my soul as its plunder.
If not for You,
I am sure that I’d go under.
© 12-4-08
Author notes
Freeform Rhyme...
A contest entry
- De Wkyd et de Luminous by Evenstar.
700 points, ended December 17, 2008, 7 entries
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an interesting poem.In a way i thought ot portrayed inner darkness nicely. Though when we think of darkness we all think of different things. Good luck in the contest.
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Beautifully written! The struggles we endure when following the Lord! Just reading your poetry lifts me up higher! Please don't ever stop writing!!!!
Kiki
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woa
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interesting write...mac
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interesting write...mac
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Excellent
I love the unique rhyme and beat to this poem - very hypnotic effect.
- jo -
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Thanks, Jo!
Love ya, girl! Blessings to you and your family!
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