You don't know what you do to me
Everytime I see you
I get a feeling deep inside
I get a feeling that's too hard to hide
A chill up my spine
My heart skips a beat
But you pass on by
Never seeing me as more than a friend
A contest entry
- Shh - Don't tell anyone by Suzanne Dia.
3500 points, ended January 5, 28 entries
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Comments
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This is a brilliant short poem about having a crush
I like that you build up the tension in the middle of the poem and then the ending is such an anticlimax - it is a disheartening ending - but really effective in making me want to walk into the image that you paint and grab them, turn them around and point you out!
♦ M
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Wow, this is great and such a hard reality to face every time you see someone that you love so much. You can only hope that in time he or she will turn around and realize just how much you care for them. Great work and good luck to you!
Jeremy0826 -
Humm..very personal sharing you did and made this life a thought to ponder by the reference you made is love and love is not always from the both sides..heart felt indeed...
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