Doors bashed down by terrorists,
whole families dragooned into silence
as fear was prolix in the atmosphere,
an ineffable terror of the times.
Marshall law prevailed extensively
as power searched for its enemies,
greed ruled the land,
drinking blood of the innocents
as its nourishment.
Riots, once a form of protest,
were unmercifully eliminated
in violent ways,
as freedom of speech
became a lost word in history.
Author notes
December 2, 2008 -
prolix \proh-LIKS\ adjective
1 : unduly prolonged or drawn out : too long
*2 : marked by or using an excess of words
Example Sentence:
Legal writing is not always prolix; after all, the word brief refers to a legal document, and most judges demand that briefs be brief.
December 3, 2008 -
dragoon \druh-GOON\ verb
1 : to subjugate or persecute by harsh use of troops
*2 : to force into submission or compliance especially by violent measures
Example Sentence:
Boys of all ages were taken from their families and dragooned into fighting for the rebel armies.
December 4, 2008 -
ineffable \in-EFF-uh-bul\ adjective
1 *a : incapable of being expressed in words : indescribable b : unspeakable
2 : not to be uttered : taboo
Example Sentence:
Ed felt an ineffable joy at the sight of his son walking toward him from the plane.
Armistice - ceasefire or resolution. In my title, I am using that word to mean a 'resolution to final destruction'......still thinking on my title....lol
I count 67 words
A contest entry
- Vocabulary VIII - by Bear by Arkbear.
550 points, ended December 16, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow... Powerful piece...
Rife with vivid imagery & great use of metaphor in the visualisation...
Compelling narrative with drama that raced along in its urgency for resolution building up to a profound truth...
Yet another impressive piece...
Well done!!!
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Thank you so much 'Fritz...' - glad you enjoyed this. It was a little difficult fitting in those required words...lol.
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Congrats on the Bronze
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Thank you 'Xianaria' - congrats on your Gold!
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Hello Boom
*bashed*...Hmmm...not a word I would have chose -
Using all 3 *required* words in your 1st S* was a tad awkward, as I saw 3 S*'s, and I was hoping to find each word in each S*.....no biggie.....but after such a pondering 1st S*, your other 2 seemed to have lost the Power of the 1st............however...............I do like it ~
Also....Marshall Law.....sould be..>>>
Martial Law
Other than those few areas....you have done well...nice Title as well....Presentation is great......good luck and God bless you!
Bear ~
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thank you Bear. I guess to me, when I see terrorists (for lack of better word) tearing down someone's door - it's like they are bashing it in....that's the word visual I get - just a personal image, I guess.
I was surprised when all three words landed in my first verse - but it seemed to fit, so I left it that way....
LOLOL - I can NOT believe I missed 'MARTIAL' law!
.....LOL
thanks
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Yes, I can see *bashed* being used now .....thanks for the explanation
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poignant, your description brings real picture before our eyes, thanks for sharing
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Thank you so much 'Venugopal' - glad you enjoyed this.
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How sadly the truth of this verse seeps into the soul.
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Thanks Az - glad you enjoyed this one.
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I love the title! And this is a stark indictment of humanity today.. or should I say the lack of it! Wonderfully written!
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Thank you kiwi - glad you enjoyed.
I wanted 'armageddon' in the title, but ended up with this and haven't had a chance to get back to it...lol...
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Been this way throughout history, and still it continues, will never change methinks... excellent write
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Thank you 'poppa' - glad you liked this.
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Very nicely done! Shame that it holds truth within. You have done an excellent job here hunni, created a bleak and dark air to the amazing imagery. And I love the word 'prolix'! Pleased you put the meaning in, save me looking it up
learnt something new from you again Good luck in the contest
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Thank you LadyD - glad you liked this. I'm not sure about it, but it's what my thoughts were (using those words!...lol)...
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I think that this is a well written piece for the contest that you have entered good luck to you in it best wishes always be well.
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Thanks Starz - glad you enjoyed.
(and where is YOUR entry????)
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I am not going to enter.
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awww - come on! I gave it a shot!...lol
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