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For Choices Made

The breeze is come, the scent of past,
of times I knew, and thought would last,
of times I needed and you came,
those times are gone, it's such a shame

That I was blind, and gave no thought,
to how a fool deserved his lot
when he grew smug and cavalier  
only to see it disappear

The fool was me, the choice I made,
and such a tragic price I paid.
for just one night, when you called out
I wasn't there, was not about.

And, now it's been so long and yet,
I can't go on and can't forget
the fire within which died that day,
when selfishness drove you away

Tomorrow I'll seek to put aside
  those memories, and to abide,
  with choices made, with tragic cost,
try to forget all I that I lost
all that I lost

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  • toomysterious
    January 10
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    So hauntingly beautiful and sad. We do indeed have to learn to live with the choices we make.


  • Swan song gold member
    January 9
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    Excellent and smooth and the refrain in the end of the poem just seemed to add to this fine poem


  • LunaAmara
    December 12, 2008

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    Wow. This is really great. And I love the rhyme scheme!
    I know exactly how you feel--but the important part is that you realized your mistake and you are learning from it.


  • Onomarith
    December 7, 2008

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    veeeeeeeeeeeeeery nice

    its just like a series of diamonds passing by your eyes........love this one and i am adding this to my fave!


  • Sandygram
    December 6, 2008

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    Stunning Poem

    You have penned an amazing and heartfelt poem. Sometimes there are those whom learn there lessons the hard way when it is too late.
    This so deserves the Gold. The rhyme and flow and content were perfect. Wonderful take on the contest prompt. Take care. Have a wonderful weekend.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    Such a sad piece that makes we want to push you two back together again. It's so sad when we realise our mistakes too late and you have expressed this here with such regret in your words.
    All the best with this.
    Gaylene


  • ennovy silver member
    December 4, 2008

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    Masterpiece of Emotions

    This is the gold, and I know it's truly what the poet is looking for in this contest....an excellent write and dynamic poem of emotions, lost, love, and regret.......novy


  • Denerica
    December 4, 2008
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    As always it just flows and can feel your emotions and what is in your heart. Blessings brother.


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    December 4, 2008

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    you always have such an incredible and lovely flow to all your writes.
    we often never see ourselves to blame
    very insightful
    beautifully written my friend
    God bless you...

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